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12．假如你叫孫維，在去年夏令營認識的一個朋友Jim從英國給你寄來一件禮物------一件紅色的襯衫，并附有一封信．在信中他向你問好，他想知道你近來在忙些什么．請你給他寫一封回信表示感謝．回信要包括以下內容：
（1）向Jim問好并對他表示感謝．
（2）禮物是你最喜歡的顏色，尺寸很合適，你非常喜歡．
（3）告訴Jim你近來很好，上周剛過完生日，生日聚會很熱鬧．
（4）詢問Jim近況，并表示希望他能來中國．
注意：（1）詞數：100--120個詞左右；
（2）可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Jim
First of all，thanks for your present，and I like this red shirt very much．Red is my favorate color，and its size is exact．I think this shirt fits me well．Thank you again!Recently，I am fine．Last week，I held a birthday party，and it's very wonderful．There are so many friends in my party that I feel happy．（高分句型一）It's a very unforgettable party．
How is it gong with you？There is no denying that China is a very great country with a long history，and it's beautiful．（高分句型二）I hope you can come to China．If you come，I will treat you well．
Best wishes!
Yours，
Sun Wei．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據提示信息在去年夏令營認識的一個朋友Jim從英國給你寄來一件禮物------一件紅色的襯衫，并附有一封信．在信中他向你問好，他想知道你近來在忙些什么．請你給他寫一封回信表示感謝，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：（1）向Jim問好并對他表示感謝．（2）禮物是你最喜歡的顏色，尺寸很合適，你非常喜歡．（3）告訴Jim你近來很好，上周剛過完生日，生日聚會很熱鬧．（4）詢問Jim近況，并表示希望他能來中國． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：First of all首先；Recently最近；There is no denying that…不可否認；
There are so many friends in my party that I feel happy．（高分句型一）
There is no denying that China is a very great country with a long history，and it's beautiful．（高分句型二）

解答 Dear Jim，
      First of all，thanks for your present，and I like this red shirt very much．Red is my favorate color，and its size is exact．I think this shirt fits me well．Thank you again!Recently，I am fine．Last week，I held a birthday party，and it's very wonderful．There are so many friends in my party that I feel happy．（高分句型一）It's a very unforgettable party．
      How is it gong with you？There is no denying that China is a very great country with a long history，and it's beautiful．（高分句型二）I hope you can come to China．If you come，I will treat you well．
      Best wishes!
                                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                   Sun Wei

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．