Question

請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，并結(jié)合事例，用英語寫一篇短文。

Diligence is the means by which one makes up for one’s dullness. If you are not good at something, you may as well practise it many times until you make it.

注意：

①無須寫標(biāo)題；

②除詩歌外，文體不限；

③內(nèi)容必須結(jié)合你生活中的一個(gè)事例；

④文中不得透露個(gè)人姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

⑤詞數(shù)不少于120；如引用提示語則不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

 

Answer 1

One possible version：

As is universally acknowledged, practice makes perfect. Needless to say, practice is of great significance for us to challenge drawbacks and achieve success.

It remains fresh in my memory that there was a time when I suffered great frustration in learning English. Failing to master the new words, I gave way to despair, as a consequence of which my academic performance got from bad to worse. Fortunately, a scene that happened to a little boy changed me. At that time I accidentally found him practicing riding bicycle in the playground. Though constantly falling off the bicycle and in pain, he never abandoned it. Instead, he encouraged himself to practice over and over again. At length, he could ride skillfully. Inspired by him, I set about paying more attention and energy to practicing English words and sentences and eventually the progress achieved was considerable.

As is shown in the case above, only by practicing a lot can the flower of success blossom.

【解析】

試題分析：根據(jù)提示判斷本文屬于話題作文。命題者在提示語中明確提出了話題diligence“勤奮”。由最后一句提示語 practise it many times until you make it 很容易聯(lián)想到practice makes perfect“熟能生巧”這句話。這個(gè)話題很貼近學(xué)生的生活，所以在第二段聯(lián)系實(shí)際事例時(shí)會(huì)相對(duì)輕松。當(dāng)然在列舉事例時(shí)要主要不要透露個(gè)人信息。描寫完事例后可用幾句話證明文章觀點(diǎn)，以豐富文章主體部分。因?yàn)槭吕�貼近生活，注意不要使用過于簡(jiǎn)單的詞匯或短語或過多的口語，適當(dāng)使用一些高級(jí)詞匯和短語，會(huì)使文章提升檔次。最后一段用兩到三句話總結(jié)事例，點(diǎn)名主題。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】

本篇范文靈活使用各種句式如非限制性定語從句As is universally acknowledged，As is shown in the case above，定語從句a scene that happened to a little boy changed me,it作形式主語that引導(dǎo)真正的主語從句It remains fresh in my memory that there was a time when I suffered great frustration in learning English,倒裝句 only by practicing a lot can the flower of success blossom等，使文章結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，同時(shí)也顯示了作者對(duì)英語法語的熟練掌握。在文章第一段和最后一段句首使用as引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，在結(jié)構(gòu)上使得文章有序不凌亂。其次，在第一段引入諺語practice makes perfect是文章的亮點(diǎn)之一。再者，文章第二段現(xiàn)在分詞作伴隨狀語的用法也很巧妙。如Failing to master the new words,Though constantly falling off the bicycle and in pain和Inspired by him。最后，文中高級(jí)詞匯的使用如significance，At length，considerable也為文章整體層次的提示有很大貢獻(xiàn)。