Question

【題目】With the widespread use of technologies like GPS and Internetconnected cameras，parents can now keep an eye on their children wherever they are.

The combination of hightech tools and highlyprotective parents has set off the creation of a GPSequipped wristwatch that allows parents to listen in real time to what their children are doing.The device has caused complaints from teachers since some parents began equipping their children with the watch so they can listen in on what happens at school.

A teacher surnamed You at a wellknown primary school in Pudong New Area discovered someone was eavesdropping(偷聽) on her lessons after a parent of one of her students posted something she said online while class was still on.You soon found out the parent had given her child a watch that could send out the sounds in the classroom to her mobile phone.Soon，other parents decided to equip their own children with the devices.

You was annoyed to find out her students’ parents were spying on her.It made her feel as if they distrusted her.After You told her fellow teachers what had happened，they discovered that some of their students were also wearing the watches.

寫作內(nèi)容

1．用約30個單詞寫出上文概要；

2．用約120個單詞發(fā)表你的觀點，內(nèi)容包括：

(1)闡述你對家長如此運用高科技產(chǎn)品的看法；

(2)用2～3個理由或論據(jù)支撐你的觀點。

寫作要求

1.寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語句；

2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱；

3．不必寫標題。

評分標準

內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當。

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Answer 1

【答案】To keep an eye on their children，many parents nowadays equip their children at school with wristwatches.Despite its convenience，teachers hold a negative attitude as they feel spied on.

Generally，I stand on the teachers’ side and don’t support those parents’ practice.To begin with，listening in on what happens at school via wristwatches，parents are caring too much for their children，which shows a departure from their initial intention of making their kids learn to be independent.In addition，with the wristwatches sending out sounds frequently in class，students will unavoidably be distracted，which results in their underachievement in study.Last but not least，this equipment is a symbol of distrust in schools and an invasion of privacy to teachers and other students.

To conclude，we’d better say no to the hightech devices of wristwatches in class.No one can base their own convenience on others’ inconvenience.

【解析】本文屬于讀寫任務寫作，動筆前，一定要認真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，本文主要講了對家長使用智能手表來監(jiān)控孩子學習的看法，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

【亮點說明】這篇范文要點全面，語言精煉，簡單句和復雜句交叉使用：如parents are caring too much for their children，which shows a departure from their initial intention of making their kids learn to be independent.這里使用了非限制性定語從句；students will unavoidably be distracted，which results in their underachievement in study.這里使用了非限制性定語從句。