Question

17．假設(shè)你是李華，一名高三學(xué)生，在網(wǎng)絡(luò)上看到一所國外大學(xué)的招生信息 （admission information），該大學(xué)對中國學(xué)生開設(shè)30多個專業(yè)，你對此非常感興趣，打算用英語撰寫一份個人申請，主要內(nèi)容包括：
1．想申請的專業(yè)；
2．個人優(yōu)勢；
3．進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的設(shè)想．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．書信格式已給出；
3．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to usChinese students．
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．Therefore，my plan is to join the Students'Union and participate in somemeaningful social activities to learn some advanced management experience．
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，向?qū)χ袊鴮W(xué)生開設(shè)30多個專業(yè)的國外一所大學(xué)寫一封申請書．寫作要點(diǎn)包括：1．想申請的專業(yè)； 2．個人優(yōu)勢； 3．進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的設(shè)想．時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．人稱以第一人稱和第三人稱為主．重要短語：apply for…（申請…），offer sth to sb（給某人提供某物），do well in …（在…方面做得好），promote my organizingability （提升我的組織能力），be determined to do （下定決心做某事），participate in （參加），hear from sb（收到某人來信）．
【高分句型】
1．I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted my organizing ability．
這里是which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，which在從句中作主語，指代前面整個主句的內(nèi)容．
2．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be a manager as my dream job．
這里是現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式 Having organized 作原因狀語，主句的主語是I與動詞organize構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to usChinese students．（想申請的專業(yè)）
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（個人優(yōu)勢）
Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的設(shè)想）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．