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10．假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三（1）班學(xué)生李華，班里一名高一高二時(shí)一直學(xué)習(xí)很優(yōu)秀的學(xué)生王毅，在進(jìn)入高三時(shí)考試成績不佳，感到很苦惱．請根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)用英語給他寫封信：
1．幫他分析原因
2．給他提出建議
3．陳述你幫助他的具體打算
注意：詞數(shù)100左右．開頭、結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總字?jǐn)?shù)．
Dear Wang Yi，
I'm sorry to learn your present condition．
In my memory，you were excellent in Senior 1 and Senior 2．However，when you enter Senior 3，you haven't got good marks．In my opinion，something must be wrong with your method of studies．In addition，you are experiencing too much pressure，which does great harm to you．（高分句型一）Therefore，you should change a bit．First，you should follow the teachers，and understand all they have taught in class．Second，you should make your own plan，and improve yourself bit by bit．Third，you should learn to relax．For example，you can walk，chat after class，or play table tennis sometimes．If you are willing to talk to me，you can call me or send me an email．（高分句型二） Hope you will get used to the new life and have your grades improved soon．（高分句型三）
Best regards．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三（1）班學(xué)生李華，班里一名高一高二時(shí)一直學(xué)習(xí)很優(yōu)秀的學(xué)生王毅，在進(jìn)入高三時(shí)考試成績不佳，感到很苦惱．請根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn)用英語給他寫封信，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：幫他分析原因；給他提出建議；陳述你幫助他的具體打算2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：In my memory在我的記憶中；However然而；In my opinion，以我的觀點(diǎn)來看；In addition另外；do great harm to 對…有害；Therefore因此；get used to適應(yīng)；
In addition，you are experiencing too much pressure，which does great harm to you．（高分句型一）
If you are willing to talk to me，you can call me or send me an email．（高分句型二）
Hope you will get used to the new life and have your grades improved soon．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Wang Yi，
       I'm  sorry to learn your present condition．In my memory，you were excellent in Senior 1 and Senior 2．However，when you enter Senior 3，you haven't got good marks．In my opinion，something must be wrong with your method of studies．In addition，you are experiencing too much pressure，which does great harm to you．（高分句型一）Therefore，you should change a bit．First，you should follow the teachers，and understand all they have taught in class．Second，you should make your own plan，and improve yourself bit by bit．Third，you should learn to relax．For example，you can walk，chat after class，or play table tennis sometimes．If you are willing to talk to me，you can call me or send me an email．（高分句型二）
       Hope you will get used to the new life and have your grades improved soon．（高分句型三）
       Best regards．
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．