Question

書面表達(dá)（滿分25分）
5月 1日,高二(3)班的學(xué)生志愿者Li Yue 和Zhang Hua去陽光敬老院
(Sunshine Nursing Home)開展志愿者活動(dòng)(送水果、打掃、聊天等)。假如你是校
英語報(bào)的記者李華,請按下列要點(diǎn)用英語寫一則100-120個(gè)詞的新聞報(bào)道.
注意:
1.時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、人物活動(dòng)；
2.老人們的反映；
3.簡短評論；
4.報(bào)道的標(biāo)題和記者姓名已給出.(不計(jì)詞數(shù))。
Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
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By Li Hua, School Newspaper

Answer 1

Student Volunteers Brought Sunshine to the Elderly
On May Day,Li Yue and Zhuang Hua, students from Class Three, Grade Two, went to Sunshine Nursing Home and did some voluntary work. Upon their arrival, Li Yue and zhang Hua were warmly welcomed, and respectfully, they presented the elderly with flowers and fruits. Then, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor. Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.
When it was time for the volunteers to leave the elderly people thanked them for their kindness. They said it was such a beautiful day that they would remember it forever.
Li Yue and Zhang Hua were very happy. What they did has brought joy to others and enriched their own lives.

試題分析：考生首先要仔細(xì)審題，包括以下幾個(gè)方面：（1）層次結(jié)構(gòu)，（2）句子的時(shí)態(tài)（3）內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)。尤其是內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)要把握準(zhǔn)確到位，這是半開放性作文，要點(diǎn)需要考生拿捏準(zhǔn)確以及正確，這加大了寫作難度。再者考生要注意盡可能使句子的表達(dá)形式多樣化，適當(dāng)?shù)氖褂靡恍└呒壘涫胶透呒壴~匯，以提高書面表達(dá)的檔次和可讀性。考生要多使用復(fù)雜句，如范文里面的句子, they started working at once, cleaning the windows and sweeping the floor.這句話用了非謂語動(dòng)詞。Everything done, they sat in the yard chatting with the elderly people.這句話用的是獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)。
點(diǎn)評：作文要層次清晰，要點(diǎn)全面，表達(dá)流暢，切合作文要求，句子結(jié)構(gòu)準(zhǔn)確，信息內(nèi)容完整，篇章結(jié)構(gòu)連貫。文中使用一些極佳的詞語和句子為文章增色，使用高級詞匯及句型。