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8．上周六下午四點(diǎn)左右，學(xué)生會(huì)搞了一次環(huán)�；顒�(dòng).30名學(xué)生到團(tuán)城山公園拾垃圾．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示寫一篇小組長(zhǎng)工作總結(jié)演講．
內(nèi)容包括：目的 提高公眾的環(huán)保意識(shí)
效果1．吸引了一些人的參與和支持．
2．因?yàn)闀r(shí)間太晚．參與的人不多．
3．有些人甚至不知道我們?cè)诟墒裁矗?br />建議…
注意：1．詞數(shù)120左右，2．行文應(yīng)連貫．內(nèi)容應(yīng)完整，3．開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)與落款已為你寫好．
My fellow students，As head of the group，I would like to report to you on the event．
                                                         
…Thank you．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息上周六下午四點(diǎn)左右，學(xué)生會(huì)搞了一次環(huán)保活動(dòng).30名學(xué)生到團(tuán)城山公園拾垃圾．請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列提示寫一篇小組長(zhǎng)工作總結(jié)演講，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：目的 提高公眾的環(huán)保意識(shí)；  效果（1）．吸引了一些人的參與和支持．（2）．因?yàn)闀r(shí)間太晚．參與的人不多．（3）．有些人甚至不知道我們?cè)诟墒裁矗?nbsp;2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般過(guò)去在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：for the purpose of 為了…的目的；pick up撿起；Actually事實(shí)上；For one thing一方面；For another另一方面；Otherwise，否則；put up 張貼；
Last Friday，the Students'Union organized a cleanup project in Zhongshan park，for the purpose of raising the environmental awareness of the public．（高分句型一）
When we were collecting the litter，many people came to our help，showing considerable appreciation and support．（高分句型二）
And also，we can put up some posters to tell people what we are doing and call their attention to environmental protection．（高分句型三）

解答 My fellow students，
     As head of the group，I would like to report to you on the event．
     Last Friday，the Students'Union organized a cleanup project in Zhongshan park，for the purpose of raising the environmental awareness of the public．（高分句型一）At around 4 p．m．，35 students went to the park to pick up the litter．（活動(dòng)目的）
     Actually，we did a wonderful job．When we were collecting the litter，many people came to our help，showing considerable appreciation and support．（高分句型二）But our work still left something to be desired．For one thing，since we started late in the afternoon，it was not long enough to attract enough people．For another，some people passed by because they even didn't know what we were doing．Otherwise，our project could have been much better and more effective．（活動(dòng)效果）
     Next time if we have similar activities，I think we should try to start earlier．And also，we can put up some posters to tell people what we are doing and call their attention to environmental protection．（高分句型三）（個(gè)人建議）
     Thank you．

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