Question

20．假如你是李華，你的美國(guó)網(wǎng)友Peter參加中國(guó)象棋網(wǎng)絡(luò)挑戰(zhàn)賽獲得了一等獎(jiǎng)．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示寫(xiě)一封英文電子郵件向他表示祝賀．
1）祝賀他獲獎(jiǎng)；
2）肯定他付出的努力；
3）詢(xún)問(wèn)何時(shí)方便，在網(wǎng)上切磋棋藝．
注意：
1）詞數(shù)100左右；
2）可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫； 3）開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好．
Dear Peter，
I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations …
to you on your winning the first prize in the Chinese Chess Network Challenge．As your friend，I just want you to know how glad I am at your success．（高分句型一）
"Everything comes to him who waits．"For these years，you've shown great interest in Chinese chess and kept on practicing it every day．Not only have you read many books about Chinese chess strategy，but also you have competed in all kinds of Chinese chess contest．（高分句型二）Finally，you succeeded in winning the online competition!
So I'm so happy that you become champion of this network challenge．At last，I hope to play Chinese chess with you so that we can make progress together．（高分句型三）Please tell me when you have time．
Congratulations again．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息 假如你是李華，你的美國(guó)網(wǎng)友Peter參加中國(guó)象棋網(wǎng)絡(luò)挑戰(zhàn)賽獲得了一等獎(jiǎng)．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示寫(xiě)一封英文電子郵件向他表示祝賀．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：1）祝賀他獲獎(jiǎng)；2）肯定他付出的努力；3）詢(xún)問(wèn)何時(shí)方便，在網(wǎng)上切磋棋藝．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：the first prize一等獎(jiǎng)；keep on 一直做某事；Not only，but also不僅，而且；Finally最后；make progress 取得進(jìn)步；succeed in doing成功做成某事；
As your friend，I just want you to know how glad I am at your success．（高分句型一）
Not only have you read many books about Chinese chess strategy，but also you have competed in all kinds of Chinese chess contest．（高分句型二）
At last，I hope to play Chinese chess with you so that we can make progress together．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Petet
       I am writing to offer my sincere congratulations to you on your winning the first prize in the Chinese Chess Network Challenge．As your friend，I just want you to know how glad I am at your success．（高分句型一）
"Everything comes to him who waits．"For these years，you've shown great interest in Chinese chess and kept on practicing it every day．Not only have you read many books about Chinese chess strategy，but also you have competed in all kinds of Chinese chess contest．（高分句型二）Finally，you succeeded in winning the online competition!
       So I'm so happy that you become champion of this network challenge．At last，I hope to play Chinese chess with you so that we can make progress together．（高分句型三）Please tell me when you have time．
       Congratulations again．
    Yours，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．