Question

假定你是李華，你的筆友Jane 最近總是感覺身體不適，因此寫信向你詢問如何保持健康。請你根據(jù)以下要點提示給她回信。

要點提示：1.合理飲食；2. 鍛煉身體；3. 保證充足睡眠，不要熬夜。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)不少于120個（信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)）；

2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Jane,

I’m sorry to hear that you are not very well these days.

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Best wishes.

Yours sincerely.

Lihua

 

Answer 1

One possible version:

Dear Jane,

I’m sorry to hear that you are not very well these days. In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy. Here is my advice.

Firstly, you should keep a balanced diet. You should avoid eating food high in fat and too much sweet food. You’d better eat more fresh vegetables and fruits. Secondly, taking exercise every day helps building a strong body. Why not take more exercise in your spare time? As we all know, regular exercise is an important part of keeping us healthy. Finally, make sure you have enough sleep and you mustn’t stay up too late at night.

By eating properly and exercising regularly, you can keep your body at a proper weight and stay healthy. I truly hope my advice is helpful and you’ll get well soon.

Best wishes.

Yours sincerely.

Lihua

【解析】

試題分析：題目是說，假如你是李華，你的筆友Jane 最近總是感覺身體不適，因此寫信向你詢問如何保持健康。文章要求根據(jù)給出的要點給Jane回信，要點提示有：1.合理飲食；2. 鍛煉身體；3. 保證充足睡眠，不要熬夜。但是要注意：詞數(shù)不少于120個（信的開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)）；可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

亮點說明：

本文是一封書信，采用總—分—總的結(jié)構(gòu)，十分清晰地告訴對方如何來保持健康。文中運用了許多固定短語，如keep a balanced diet，had better do ,in one’s spare time，As we all know，keeping healthy, get well等，這些都顯示了作者平時良好的積累；使用連接詞，如firstly, secondly, finally使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)很清晰；動名詞做主語的使用，如taking exercise every day helps…、反問句的使用，如Why not take more exercise …、by做狀語的使用，如By eating properly and exercising regularly等，都為文章增色不少。

問題說明：

文章有一處略顯Chinglish，如In your letter you asked me how to stay healthy，明顯是用中文思維來思考的。此外，本文基本上都是使用短句，這使得文章很平淡 ，不夠出采。

考點：書信類作文。