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眾所周知，2012年11月9日黨的十八大報(bào)告中提出了建設(shè)“美麗中國”的理念。近來，我校也圍繞這一主題積極開展美麗校園的活動。作為一名高中生，請你就如何美化校園談?wù)剛�(gè)人看法和建議。
內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：1.遵守校紀(jì)校規(guī)。 （如：憑電子學(xué)生證進(jìn)出校園，升旗和早操做到快、齊、靜……）
2．言行舉止文明優(yōu)雅，講究衛(wèi)生，愛護(hù)公物。
3．有良好的精神面貌，穿戴整潔干凈，穿校服進(jìn)出校園。
注意： 1. 詞數(shù)120左右。
2 .文章的開頭已經(jīng)給出（不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)），可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
3．參考詞：rules and regulations（規(guī)章制度），Electronic student ID（電子學(xué)生證）
mental outlook(精神面貌)
Recently, our school has been carrying out some meaningful activities to beautify the schoolyard…__________________________________________________________________________________
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Answer 1

Recently, our school has been carrying out some meaningful activities to beautify the schoolyard.
As we all know, school is another home of ours, which also needs protecting. As a member of the big family, we students should obey its rules and regulations. Such as going in and out with showing our Electronic student ID, when raising National flag and doing morning exercises, we’d better move fast, in order and keep quiet.
Also, it is important for us to behave ourselves in the campus. We each should be aware of the importance of looking after public things. We must pay attention to hygiene, not spitting in the daily life.
Last but not the least, having good mental outlook is significant as well. We should wear neatly and tidily when going to school. During our staying at school, we may as well wear school uniform.
It is the smallest things that count. Only when we form good habits can we be able to have a better studing environment.

試題分析：本題是一篇材料作文。題目要求寫一篇關(guān)于如何美化校園的文章，來談?wù)勛约旱目捶ê徒ㄗh。作文要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出，可以分段分別論述所給要點(diǎn)，注意作文的連貫性，做到流暢、自然。最好使用第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)來寫。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文使用了短語As we all know, Such as, behave ourselves, be aware of, looking after, pay attention to, as well, may as well等，使作文內(nèi)容充實(shí)而不單調(diào)；范文使用了較多的語法知識，像定語從句which also needs protecting, it is important for us to...句型, 非謂語動詞having good mental outlook, It is...that強(qiáng)調(diào)句型和倒裝Only when we...can...等，語法知識掌握牢固；同時(shí)，范文還注意使用連接詞連接上下文，像Also, Last but not the least等。