Question

13．假定你是中學生李華．在一位名叫 Tiger Mom 的學生家長的博客上，你看到如下內容．請你根據(jù)博客內容、寫作要點和要求，給這位家長回復．
I'm the mother of a fourteen-year-old．I have a rule for my daughter：be among the top 5students or get punished in one way or another．She has been doing very well in school，but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her．Am I wrong？
寫作要點：
1．表明自己的看法；
2．陳述至少兩點理由；
3．提出至少兩條建議．
要求：
1．短文詞數(shù)不少于 100（不含已寫好的部分）；
2．內容充實，結構完整，語意連貫；
3．書寫須清晰、工整．
Hi，Tiger Mom，
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China．As far as I'm concerned，it is not quite right for you to do so．My reasons are as follows．
Firstly，too much pressure leads to lack of time to participate in after-classactivities．As a result，your daughter can't get fully developed．Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person．
So I suggest you take your friends'advice．Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities．Besides，you might as well let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do and give her support and encouragementin time．
I hope you will find these suggestions helpful．
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 寫好這類作文要注意幾個步驟：1． 認真審題，找準提示語中的關鍵詞或句，確定中心思想．2． 依據(jù)關鍵句，草擬提綱，梳理文章的脈絡3． 準確定位人稱、時態(tài)．注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．4．最后還要認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等
高分句型一：
Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person
更重要的是，懲罰決不是幫助她建立自信心的明智選擇，這對一個人來說是非常重要和有價值的．
高分句型二：
Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities．
與其給你的女兒太多的壓力，讓她更多的時間做其他活動更可�。�

解答 Hi，Tiger Mom，
What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China． As far as I'm concerned，it is not quite right for you to do so．My reasons are as follows．
Firstly，too much pressure leads to lack of time to participate in after-class activities．As a result，your daughter can't get fully developed．Furthermore，by no means is punishment a wise choice to help her build self-confidence，which is of great importance and value to a person（高分句型一）．
So I suggest you take your friends'advice．Instead of putting too much pressure on you daughter，it is more advisable to allow her more time for other activities（高分句型二）．Besides，you might as well let her make mistakes of her own as we teenagers often do and give her support and encouragement in time．
I hope you will find these suggestions helpful．
Li Hua

點評 開放性作文給出一定的寫作主題，并此為基礎進行思維和聯(lián)想，自由發(fā)揮．不僅考查學生在內容、結構安排、語言運用和組織方面的能力，而且對學生的想像力、發(fā)散思維、歸納判斷能力也有很高的要求．