Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

This is a picture of a ballet dancer whose left foot looks shockingly different from the right one. Some even jokes that the left foot represents how elegant ballet dancers look. On the contrary, the right one reveals the nature of those dancers’ life. One can hardly imagine how much time and effort have been devoted to endless practice.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

請根據(jù)你對所示圖片及文字的理解，寫一篇150詞左右的文章，要點如下：

1. 以約30個詞簡要描述圖片的內(nèi)容；

2. 以約120個詞談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ瑑?nèi)容包括：

（1） 圖片給你的啟示，并舉例說明；

（2） 你最想對圖片的芭蕾舞者說什么？為什么？

【寫作要求】

1. 可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文的句子；

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和學(xué)校的名稱

3. 不必寫標(biāo)題

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞數(shù)適當(dāng)

Answer 1

【答案】

The dancer’s left foot is elegantly wrapped in her ballet shoe, tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon. The shoeless right foot, however, looks horribly different. Bruises and scars occupy every inch of her toes. （36 words）

I can only imagine the untold hardship the dancer must have endured for the endless hours of practice to look so glamorous on the stage. Likewise, behind every seemingly stunning success, there can be failures, disappointments, and embarrassments. When the whole world is crazy for JK Rowling’s Harry Potter stories, rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out. Nothing is difficult to a willing heart. However, when we admire others’ success, we should remember it is not from nowhere.

I have imagined the dancer to be my friend. I will, instead of telling her how awesome her dancing is, ask her to take good care of herself, for health is the real elegance of life. （130 words）

【解析】

試題分析:本篇書面表達(dá)屬于議論文，根據(jù)提示信息來介紹這幅圖以及自己的感受。寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫。本文寫作時可以按照描述圖片內(nèi)容、表達(dá)看法、想對舞者說著三個方面進(jìn)行介紹。3、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)。4、注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點。

【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種句式和結(jié)構(gòu)。比如The dancer’s left foot is elegantly wrapped in her ballet shoe, tied to the ankle with a silk ribbon. 定語從句。rarely do people know it was after the books had been turned down 12 times by the publisher that they finally came out. 倒裝句。Nothing is difficult to a willing heart、health is the real elegance of life.習(xí)語的使用。此外，文章還使用了大量短語inch of her toes、the untold hardship、 the endless hours of practice、stunning success 等。連接詞likewise、however使語言更加連貫。