Question

目前青少年壓力過(guò)大，為排解壓力一些青少年染上了一些惡習(xí)，如吸煙，飲酒等，請(qǐng)你以學(xué)生會(huì)的名義參照以下提示用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一封倡議書(shū)，呼吁中學(xué)生要“養(yǎng)成好習(xí)慣，健康過(guò)生活”。寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)如下：
1. 青少年中存在的惡習(xí)以及它們的危害。
2. 好習(xí)慣的重要性和必要性。
3. 呼吁你校學(xué)生養(yǎng)成好習(xí)慣，過(guò)健康生活。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)100-120。   
2. 開(kāi)頭結(jié)尾已給你寫(xiě)好不計(jì)入總數(shù)。  
3. 適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使文章內(nèi)容充實(shí)，連貫。
Dear students,
In the present world, we teenagers are living under great stress.                                                                              
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
                                                                             
That’s all. Thank you!

Answer 1

Dear students,
In the present world, we teenagers are living under great stress. As a result, in order to relieve the stress, some of us have developed bad habits, such as smoking anddrinking, which are not only bad for our health but also can do harm to our society. Besides, some students prefer junk food, causing weight problem（obesity). What’s worse, some are even addicted to the net at the cost of their studies and future.
Facing such serious situations, we must take measures to get rid of bad habits

試題分析：本文是應(yīng)用文中常見(jiàn)的倡議書(shū)。話題是呼吁中學(xué)生要“養(yǎng)成好習(xí)慣，健康過(guò)生活”。有很強(qiáng)的可寫(xiě)性，文章的要點(diǎn)也基本上都給出來(lái)了，但只是一個(gè)提綱，考生還需要做適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮。在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中，要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型，讓文章更有文采。同時(shí)在列舉措施的時(shí)候要使用合適的連接詞如： Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來(lái)很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫(xiě)作時(shí)不要啰嗦，力求簡(jiǎn)潔的表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)。
點(diǎn)評(píng)：本文是一封倡議書(shū)。具有很強(qiáng)的可寫(xiě)性，內(nèi)容貼近考生的實(shí)際情況，考生有話可說(shuō)，有話可寫(xiě)。在寫(xiě)作的過(guò)程中要注意使用合適的連接詞如，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)的解析如強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。