Question

9．假設(shè)你是李華，你在英國的筆友Tommy最近為自己發(fā)胖感到苦惱．請你根據(jù)所給提示，給他發(fā)一封100詞左右的電子郵件．郵件內(nèi)容包括：
1．可能造成發(fā)胖的原因 （如飲食、鍛煉…），至少寫出兩條；
2．簡述你自己相關(guān)的健康生活方式．
注意：郵件開頭和落款已經(jīng)為你寫好．
Dear Tommy，
I am really feeling bad that you are being troubled by overweight these days．
            ．
Yours
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇作文要求你幫筆友Tommy給出避免發(fā)胖的建議．注意題中已經(jīng)給出的兩點提示，主要圍繞這兩條行文，還可以自己添加建議．注意用到第二人稱，時態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時．重要短語：
 go on a diet 節(jié)食，suggest sb．do，建議某人做…
高分句子：
1．It is said that overweight kids don't exercise enough or eat right．本句含有重要句型，It is said…據(jù)說…
2．No matter what causes your problem，I suggest you go on a diet or just eat less for half a year and see the result．本句前半句為為what引導(dǎo)的條件狀語從句，豐富了句子結(jié)構(gòu)．

解答 Dear Tommy，
 I am really feeling bad that you are being troubled by overweight these days．
      I have read an article about overweight kids．It is said that overweight kids don't exercise enough or eat right（高分句型）．Some kids are overweight because fast food restaurants serve the wrong foods or it's a problem of genes（點明發(fā)胖原因）．No matter what causes your problem，I suggest you go on a diet or just eat less for half a year and see the result（高分句型）．
      Also，don't forget to take more exercise．You know，every afternoon after class I play basketball together with my classmates（給出建議）．
      Hope you feel better and look forward to good news about you．
 Yours，
 Li Hua

點評 要想使自己的書面表達得高分，首先要做到揚長避短．"揚長"就是發(fā)揮自身的優(yōu)勢，使用熟練掌握的句型，"避短"就是避開自己的弱點，盡量做到不犯錯誤或少犯錯誤，這是讀寫任務(wù)得分的關(guān)鍵所在．