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【題目】假定你是李華，你校學(xué)生會(huì)于2018年1月5日下午舉行了“校園義賣”活動(dòng)。請(qǐng)你用英語寫封信給你的美國筆友Peter, 告訴他此次活動(dòng)的有關(guān)情況，內(nèi)容包括：

1.活動(dòng)目的

2. 具體內(nèi)容

3. 談?wù)勀愕母邢�、收獲和體會(huì)。

注意：1.文章開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

2.詞數(shù)： 100左右；可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

參考詞匯：校園義賣：Charity Sales in campus

Dear Peter,

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Yours,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Peter,

Our Students’ Union held a Charity Sales on the afternoon of Jan. 5th,2018 to raise money for the needy children in the poverty-stricken areas. These efforts are made to support these poor children to continue their education or improve their living.

Second-hand or unnecessary items were collected in each class before the Charity Sales. When it came to selling goods, a long line of desks were put up in the playground with a wide range of goods waiting for their potential customers. But what amazed me most is that fresh food such as sandwiches, juice were made by students on the spot. If you were here, you would be impressed by the yelling sellers, the bargaining buyer, and the happy money-collectors.

The activity is welcomed by all. For one thing, our social skills get improved and practiced. For another, offering help for others made us happy.

Best wishes！

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】此文為提綱式作文，文章主要是介紹校園活動(dòng)情況。

寫作的主要步驟為：第一步： 確定文章的要點(diǎn)：1. 活動(dòng)目的，活動(dòng)時(shí)間，活動(dòng)地點(diǎn)。2. 活動(dòng)的具體內(nèi)容，3.活動(dòng)的收獲，感想和體會(huì)。

第二步，確定時(shí)態(tài)，語態(tài)，人稱，任臣為第一人稱，時(shí)態(tài)為過去時(shí)。

第三步：起草文章，文章可大體分為三段，第一段寫信的背景， 第二段介紹活動(dòng) 第三段談?wù)劯惺埽�體會(huì)。

亮點(diǎn)分析：

使用被動(dòng)語態(tài)，使表達(dá)高級(jí)。These efforts are made to support these poor children to continue their education or improve their living.

Second-hand or unnecessary items were collected in each class before the Charity Sales.

When it came to selling goods, a long line of desks were put up in the playground with a wide range of goods waiting for their potential customers.

使用主語從句使句式簡潔。But what amazed me most is that fresh food such as sandwiches, juice were made by students on the spot.

使用虛擬語氣，If you were here, you would be impressed by the yelling sellers, the bargaining buyer, and the happy money-collectors.

文章巧妙使用連接詞。如：when it comes to, for one thing, for another 等。