Question

【題目】請(qǐng)認(rèn)真閱讀下列材料和圖表，并按照要求用英語寫一篇150詞左右的文章。

Campus security has recently attracted wide public attention. In order to ensure the safety of teachers and students, our school prohibits strangers, students’ parents included, from entering the campus at will. This rule has aroused a strong response from parents. For this reason, our school has recently conducted a public opinion survey among students on whether parents should enter campus. The results of the survey are as follows.

（寫作內(nèi)容）

1.用約30個(gè)單詞概括閱讀材料的主要內(nèi)容；

2.用約120個(gè)單詞簡(jiǎn)要描述圖中的信息(包括人數(shù)比率、觀點(diǎn)及原因)；并就“家長(zhǎng)該不該進(jìn)校園”談?wù)勀愕目捶ê屠碛伞?/span>

（寫作要求）

1.可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；

2.不必寫標(biāo)題；

3.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

（評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)）

概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，語篇連貫。

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Answer 1

【答案】Possible version 1 (不贊同):

To ensure security, strangers including parents are banned from entering our campus, which has brought about heated discussions among parents. So a survey has been made among the students about whether parents should be included.

According to the survey, 60% of the students think parents should be included because it is a rule everyone should obey. Another 25% subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone. However, the rest think the guards can make a proper decision depending on certain situations.

Personally, I agree with most students. As the saying goes, “Prevention is better than cure.” Proper measures should be taken before it’s too late. As for parents, they have some other ways to keep in touch with their children, like making calls or asking for teachers’ help. All in all, campus security calls for everyone’s concern and cooperation.

Possible version 2 (不贊同):

To ensure security, strangers including parents are banned from entering our campus, which has brought about heated discussions among parents. So a survey has been made among the students about whether parents should be included.

According to the survey, 60% of the students think parents should be included because it is a rule everyone should obey. Another 25% subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone. However, the rest think the guards can make a proper decision depending on certain situations.

I agree parents can enter campus according to the actual situation. For example, if parents come to school at the request of their children who need any help, or at the invitation of the school, the head teacher or the subject teacher to exchange information about their children’s learning, then I think the guard should let the parents into campus after contacting the relevant personnel and registering the parents’ identity information.

【解析】

這是一篇讀寫類作文。要求考生先用30個(gè)字左右概括閱讀材料，簡(jiǎn)要描述圖中信息，并就“家長(zhǎng)該不該進(jìn)校園”發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)并闡明理由。概括短文內(nèi)容應(yīng)用第三人稱。全文主要時(shí)態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

第一步：審題

體裁：讀寫類作文

時(shí)態(tài)：概括短文內(nèi)容應(yīng)用第三人稱。全文主要時(shí)態(tài)是一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)。

結(jié)構(gòu)：總分法

總分法指把主題句作為總說，把支持句作為分說，并以這種方式安排所寫內(nèi)容。

寫作要點(diǎn)：1.用約30字概括閱讀材料內(nèi)容。

（1） 為了安全起見，學(xué)校禁止陌生人包括家長(zhǎng)進(jìn)入校園，這在家長(zhǎng)之間產(chǎn)生了一些熱議。

（2） 因?yàn)檫@些熱議，學(xué)校進(jìn)行了一些調(diào)查。

2.簡(jiǎn)要描述圖中信息，比如人數(shù)比率、觀點(diǎn)及原因等。

3.就“家長(zhǎng)該不該進(jìn)�！卑l(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)和理由（贊成或反對(duì)）。

第二步:列提綱 （重點(diǎn)詞組）

be banned from；bring about heated discussions

subscribe to the view；there is no need；be a danger to；depending on certain situations；agree with；keep in touch with；call for（不贊成父母進(jìn)校）

at the request of; at the invitation of;（不贊成禁止父母進(jìn)校）

第三步：連詞成句

1. To ensure security, strangers including parents are banned from entering our campus, which has brought about heated discussions among parents.

2. Another 25% subscribe to the view that there is no need for the ban as their beloved parents couldn’t be a danger to anyone.

3. As the saying goes, “Prevention is better than cure.”(不贊成父母進(jìn)學(xué)校)

4. All in all, campus security calls for everyone’s concern and cooperation.（不贊成禁止父母進(jìn)學(xué)校）

根據(jù)提示及關(guān)鍵詞（組）進(jìn)行遣詞造句，注意主謂一致和時(shí)態(tài)問題。

第四步：連句成篇（銜接詞）

1.表文章結(jié)構(gòu)順序：First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly/Second… And then, Finally, In the end, At last

2.表并列補(bǔ)充關(guān)系：What is more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, not only…but (also), including,

3.表轉(zhuǎn)折對(duì)比關(guān)系：However, On the contrary, but, Although+clause(從句), In spite of+n/doing,On the one hand…,On the other hand… Some…,while others…,as for, so…that…

4.表因果關(guān)系：Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result

連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B詞進(jìn)行句子之間的銜接與過渡，書寫一定要規(guī)范清晰，

第五步：潤色修改