Question

假設(shè)你是李華，明天就是你的生日了，而且高考很快就要到了，你有很多話想對父母說。請你以書信的形式按照以下要點(diǎn)給父母寫一封信。詞數(shù)100 --- 120
寫作要點(diǎn)：
1、感恩父母；
2、對父母的期望；
3、自己學(xué)習(xí)的打算。
Dear Mom and Dad,
Tomorrow is my birthday and the annual college entrance examination is around the corner. On this special occasion, _____________________________
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Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Mom and Dad,
Tomorrow is my birthday and the annual college entrance examination is around the corner. On this special occasion, how I wish I could have a heart-to-heart talk with you.
Through those years of my growing up, I always feel grateful to you for your unselfish help, care and love for me. Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making remarkable progress in my studies. It will be less than three months before I take the College Entrance Examination, which makes me under great pressure. So I need your frequent support and timely help. Besides, I would like to talk more with you so that I will be always in a good state to study every day.
Mom and Dad, I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am bearing. I plan to make a detailed study schedule so that I can review lessons and practice solving problems of different subjects. It is also necessary for me to do some physical training so that I can keep fit. If possible, I will also help do some housework.
I am quite confident of my future life and I do wish you good health and a happy life.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：考查應(yīng)用文中的書信的寫作。請你以書信的形式按照以下要點(diǎn)給父母寫一封信。說出想說的話，要點(diǎn)都已經(jīng)給出，書信類短文的關(guān)鍵在于要點(diǎn)要全面包括，不能有遺漏和省略。但是要點(diǎn)只是提綱，考生還要在此基礎(chǔ)上增加細(xì)節(jié)，同時(shí)注意謀篇布局的順序，運(yùn)用合適的連接詞連接全文，同時(shí)選擇高級的詞匯和語法項(xiàng)目讓文章更有文采。審題時(shí)注意本文使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運(yùn)用合適的語法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出。難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級詞匯和固定短語準(zhǔn)確表述。還要用適當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞被句子連接起來，這樣文章顯得更連貫。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】how I wish I could have a heart-to-heart talk with you. 這句話用了感嘆句和虛擬語氣， It will be less than three months before I take the College Entrance Examination, which makes me under great pressure.這句話用了固定句型和非限制性定語從句， I would like to talk more with you so that I will be always in a good state to study every day. 這句話用的是so that引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語從句， It is also necessary for me to do some physical training so that I can keep fit.這句話用了it做形式主語， If possible, I will also help do some housework. 這句話用的是省略句，還有文章用了Besides,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更順暢。