Question

你的筆友Peter想了解四川汶川的地震情況，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示的信息，用英語(yǔ)給Peter發(fā)一封e-mail,，簡(jiǎn)單描述一下5.12地震。

要點(diǎn)如下：

1. 地震于2008年5月12日下午發(fā)生在四川汶川；

2. 當(dāng)時(shí)人們正在上班、學(xué)生正在上課；

3. 大量的房屋、學(xué)校、建筑物被毀，水電供應(yīng)中斷；

4. 有70,000多人喪生，還有很多受傷者和無(wú)家可歸者；

5. 是歷史上最嚴(yán)重的地震之一；

6. 震后，全國(guó)各地都在積極援建地震災(zāi)區(qū)，三年來，災(zāi)區(qū)發(fā)生了很大變化。

要求：

1. 短文必須包括要點(diǎn)中的所有內(nèi)容；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使內(nèi)容連貫；

3. 詞匯：災(zāi)區(qū)（the disaster-hit areas）

4. 詞數(shù)：120左右。

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Answer 1

On May 12, 2008, a big earthquake hit Wenchuan, a county in Sichuan Province. It happened in the afternoon when most people were at work and all the students were in class. When the earthquake happened, it seemed as if the world was at an end. Houses and tall buildings fell down. Water and electricity were cut off. In a few seconds the whole towns and villages were almost destroyed and lay in ruins. The number of people who were killed reached more than 70,000. Besides, a large number of people were injured and lost their homes. It was one of the biggest earthquakes in history.

Luckily, after the earthquake people from all over the country tried their best to help rebuild the disaster-hit areas. Over the past 6 years, great changes have taken place there. It has taken on a new look.

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求給筆友Peter寫一封郵件，向他介紹汶川地震的情況。寫作要點(diǎn)包括：地震發(fā)生的時(shí)間；地震發(fā)生時(shí)的情況；災(zāi)后重建工作等方面；詞數(shù)在120詞左右；必須包含所有要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使作文變得連貫；不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯(cuò)誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀。

亮點(diǎn)說明：

范文涵蓋了所有要點(diǎn)，進(jìn)行了適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣�，并注意語(yǔ)句之間的連貫性；范文還使用了定語(yǔ)從句、時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句等語(yǔ)法知識(shí)，具備較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。

語(yǔ)法方面：定語(yǔ)從句①when most people were at work，②who were killed；時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句When the earthquake happened；表語(yǔ)從句as if the world was at an end等，顯示了較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)法功底，也使作文的句式變得多樣；

短語(yǔ)和搭配方面：范文使用了fall down, cut off, lie in ruins, more than, from all over the country, try one’s best to do, take place, taken on等，使作文的內(nèi)容變得充實(shí)；

篇章結(jié)構(gòu)方面：范文注意使用besides, luckily, over the past 6 years等銜接句子和段落，使作文銜接緊密、語(yǔ)意連貫。

考點(diǎn)：書信類作文