Question

【題目】請閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。

Many people believe that in the future computers will be used in lots of everyday activities .It is thought that we won’t go shopping because many goods are available on the Internet .There will be no more books because all books will be available from electronic libraries .The Internet will be used to book holidays, rent films and order food. Most telephone calls will be made over the Internet as well .Some people are excited about these new developments .Others , however, do not think that computers will replace our present ways of shopping and communicating .

Is Internet shopping as much fun as traditional shopping ? Many people say it is not .It is fun to go into shops and look as good in person . It is also unlikely that many people will want to read large texts on our computers because paper books will possibly be more user- friendly .Maybe , computers won’t change these habits.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1．以約30個詞概括這段短文的內(nèi)容；

2．然后以約120個詞表達你對“網(wǎng)上購物”這一現(xiàn)象的觀點。內(nèi)容包括：

（1）敘述你身邊的同學(xué)對網(wǎng)上購物的看法。

（2）你喜歡的購物方式（傳統(tǒng)的購物方式還是網(wǎng)上購物）?

（3）結(jié)合自己的生活例子說明你喜歡的理由。

【寫作要求】

1.作文中可使用自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子。

2.作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學(xué)校名稱。

【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

【答案】

Possible version：

This passage mainly talks about different uses of internet shopping such as buying goods and electronic books, booking holidays, renting films and so on. It also describes different attitudes to internet shopping.

My classmates have different attitudes to internet shopping. Some think that it is very convenient to shop on line. Others believe that it is unsafe to buy goods with credit cards and it is impossible to check the quality .

As far as I’m concerned, I prefer traditional shopping. It is really fun to go into shops and look at the goods in fresh. We can choose what we really need and have a good bargain. We can talk freely with the shopkeepers instead of a cold machine. I often go shopping with my parents on weekends and we have a very good communication every time. Indeed, everything is available on line and we needn’t even leave our home. However ,we may be cheated and waste money. So traditional shopping is better than internet shopping.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇讀寫任務(wù)要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文，首先要用大約30個詞概括所給文章的大概內(nèi)容，然后用大約120個詞談?wù)剬Α?/span>網(wǎng)上購物”的看法，包括如下要點：(1) 身邊的同學(xué)對網(wǎng)上購物的看法;(2) 你喜歡的購物方式(3) 你喜歡的原因等。因為屬于論說性文章，所以在謀篇布局時可以考慮三段式的寫作模式。而且還可以使用事例來論證自己的觀點，增強文章的說服力。也可以使用文章所給內(nèi)容但是不能照抄原文句子。在論述時還要使用過渡句和連接詞來使文章內(nèi)容具有層次性和邏輯性。此外寫作時要盡量使用高級詞匯和多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，比如定語從句，強調(diào)句型等等以增加文章亮點。

【亮點說明】在本篇范文中作者開頭用大約30個字概括了所給文章的內(nèi)容，然后提出同學(xué)們的觀點：My classmates have different attitudes to internet shopping.，最后說出自己喜歡的方式和原因。這種段落安排符合論述文的要求，而且使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，層次分明。在語言方面作者使用了大量的復(fù)合句和短語結(jié)構(gòu)，顯示了作者對語言結(jié)構(gòu)的把握，同時增加了文章的采分點。比如動詞短語As far as I’m concerned, 高級詞匯available，convenient等，總之這是一篇值得借鑒的優(yōu)秀范文。