Question

13．A young ensign （海軍少尉） was given the opportunity to prepare his ship to"set sail"．Soon the ship was driven slowly out of the channel．The ensign's efficiency was remarkable．In fact，the talk was that he had set a new record for getting the ship underway．Later he was handed a radio message from the captain．
"My personal congratulations on completing the sail with amazing speed，"it read，"but next time wait until your captain goes aboard before getting underway!"
   What good is a ship without the captain？The ensign did all the right things，but he never did the most important thing!
   It is a matter of priorities （優(yōu)先）．You may accomplish a great deal every day．But are you accomplishing the truly important things？Have you put first things first？
   In work and study，in the areas of mental，physical and spiritual health，are you truly doing the important things？
   Today，will you put first things first？And how about tomorrow？And the next day？If so，you will one day discover that you are building a life that counts．
【寫作內(nèi)容】
以 Put first things first為題，寫一篇讀后感．
1．以約30個詞概括所讀文章的內(nèi)容；
2．以約120個詞表達你對該主題的見解，并包括如下要點：
 （1）對該主題發(fā)表你的看法；
 （2）以你自己或他人成長的經(jīng)歷說明你的感受．
【寫作要求】
1．作文中可以使用自己的親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容但不得直接引用原文中的句子
2．文中不能出現(xiàn)真實姓名和學校名稱．
【評分標準】概括準確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點．第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個人觀點．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱用第一和第三人稱． 重要短語：be misapprehended by（被誤解），a matter of priorities（優(yōu)先考慮的問題），leave sth behind（落下某事），exert great influence on（對某事產(chǎn)生影響），of one's own accord（自動的，自愿的），cease to do （停止做某事），upside down（顛倒的，倒置的），with the cart before the horse（本末倒置），illustrate the significance of（闡述…的重要性），give priority to（優(yōu)先考慮），be familiar with（熟悉某事），deal with（處理，對付，應付），result in（導致），keep sth in mind（把…記在腦子里）．
【高分句型一】
1．①Putting first things first is a matter of priorities，②which was misapprehended by an ensign③who prepared the sailing with remarkable efficiency but left behind the most important thing of having a captain．
①此處是動名詞"Putting first things first"作主語，主句為"is"，表語為"a matter of priorities"．
②此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導的非限制性定語從句，主句為"Putting first things first is a matter of priorities"．
③此處是由關(guān)系代詞"who"引導的定語從句，先行詞為"an ensign"．
【高分句型二】
2．Whether people put first things first exerts great influence on the process of pushing things forward and even decides the future development．
此處是由連接詞"Whether"引導的主語從句，主句為"Whether people put first things first"，謂語是由"and"連接的"exerts great influence on"和"decides"，賓語為"the process of pushing things forward"和"the future development"．
【高分句型三】
3．In the examination for high school，I should have got tens of more marks if I had given priority to the questions I was familiar with．
此處是由虛擬語氣用在條件狀語從句中，if從句中結(jié)構(gòu)為"had+過去分詞"，主句結(jié)構(gòu)為"should have done"，是與過去事實相反．
【高分句型四】
4．I can not explain①why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical ②when dealing with an important examination，③which directly resulted in many questions unfinished，and of course resulted in my failure to enter a key high school．
①此處是由連接副詞"why"引導的賓語從句，主句為"I can not explain"．
②此處是由"when"引導的時間狀語從句，從句中用了省略，結(jié)構(gòu)為"when+現(xiàn)在分詞"，可以理解為"when I delt with an important examination"．
③此處是由關(guān)系代詞"which"引導的非限制性定語從句，主句為"I can not explain why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical when dealing with an important examination"．

解答 Putting first things first is a matter of priorities，which was misapprehended by an ensign who prepared the sailing with remarkable efficiency but left behind the most important thing of having a captain．【高分句型一】（概括）
        Whether people put first things first exerts great influence on the process of pushing things forward and even decides the future development．【高分句型二】Things invariably go of their own accord．If the order is misplaced，the whole process is blocked and ceases to be an abstract concept．Therefore，we can hardly imagine how we achieve future development with things upside down，with the cart before the horse．（看法）
       My experience vividly illustrates the significance of putting first things first．In the examination for high school，I should have got tens of more marks if I had given priority to the questions I was familiar with．【高分句型三】I can not explain why I was so stubborn at that time and was quite illogical when dealing with an important examination，which directly resulted in many questions unfinished，and of course resulted in my failure to enter a key high school．【高分句型四】（以自己成長的經(jīng)歷說明感受）
       I always keep this lesson in mind and promise myself to put first things first this time for the coming NMET examination．（個人觀點）

點評 讀寫任務型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達內(nèi)容，其中準確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．