Question

20．假定你是高中生李華．你的美國筆友約翰對中國今年流行的電子紅包（electronic red envelope）很感興趣，發(fā)來郵件向你咨詢有關信息．請你給他回一封郵件，內容包括：
1）發(fā)紅包的由來；
2）電子紅包的用途：商家促銷，娛樂，還款；
3）你的看法．
注意：
1）詞數(shù)不少于100；
2）開頭和結尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計入總字數(shù)；
3）可適當增加細節(jié)，以使文章連貫
Dear John，
I would like to tell you more about a new trend in China-delivering electronic red envelopes．
           ．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息寫作要求就當下流行的一個發(fā)紅包的現(xiàn)象給出描述，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：要寫清楚發(fā)電子紅包的由來，電子紅包的用途：節(jié)日的祝福，商家促銷，娛樂，還款等．最后表明自己對發(fā)紅包這一現(xiàn)象的看法或觀點．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：想要做某事 would like to do sth．；發(fā)紅包 deliver electronic red envelopes；為了做某事 in order to do sth；send out發(fā)出
The Chinese give red envelopes with cash to children during the Spring Festival and to new couples at their wedding parties．（高分句型一）
Electronic red envelopes are mainly sent by companies in order to earn more profit．（高分句型二）
Delivering electronic red envelopes is a good way to keep Chinese tradition alive．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear John，
       I would like to tell you more about a new trend in China-delivering electronic red envelopes．
       Traditionally，red envelopes represent good luck．The Chinese give red envelopes with cash to children during the Spring Festival and to new couples at their wedding parties．（高分句型一）However，many people sent out their New Year's greetings through electronic red envelopes this year．
       Electronic red envelopes are mainly sent by companies in order to earn more profit．（高分句型二）Some people send electronic red envelopes to kids or friends for fun．Sometimes，one can even pay back money by sending electronic red envelopes．
       Delivering electronic red envelopes is a good way to keep Chinese tradition alive．（高分句型三）High technology is making our lives more and more convenient and interesting．
                                                                                                                                                                                                                           Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                                          Li Hua

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．