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9．近來，"中國(guó)式過馬路"Chinese Style of Crossing Streets在網(wǎng)絡(luò)上熱炒．請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面表格寫一篇短文談?wù)勀愕目捶ǎ?br />

現(xiàn)象	很多人過馬路時(shí)不看紅綠燈
原因[來源：學(xué)|科|網(wǎng)]	1．缺乏交通安全意識(shí) 2．匆忙趕時(shí)間
措施	1．遵守交通規(guī)則 2．你自己的建議…

注意：1．文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和班級(jí)名稱．
2．開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．字?jǐn)?shù)：120詞左右，不可逐字翻譯．
3．參考詞語：缺乏…意識(shí) lack awareness of
Chinese Style of Crossing StreetsChinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently．Now many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights．Why？I think there are two main reasons．Some people lack awareness of traffic safety．Others are so busy that they don't want to wait for the green light for a while．（出現(xiàn)的原因）
However，it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others．So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents．高分句型1：For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules，he or she should be punished．（作者的看法）
As middle school students，we should obey the traffic rules．What's more，I will try my best to advise people to follow the rules．高分句型2：Only in this way can we cross streets safely．（應(yīng)對(duì)措施）．

Answer 1

分析 本文是篇議論文，要根據(jù)三點(diǎn)要求來完成，分別是 1．中國(guó)式過馬路現(xiàn)象；2．原因，內(nèi)容包括：1．缺乏交通安全意識(shí)2．匆忙趕時(shí)間．3．措施．寫作時(shí)要注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、寫作內(nèi)容涵蓋所有要點(diǎn)，不可遺漏；2、要注意時(shí)態(tài)語態(tài)，避免出現(xiàn)語法和拼寫錯(cuò)誤；3、適當(dāng)運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和句型來為自己的文章增色．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】文章要點(diǎn)齊全，表達(dá)思路明確，知識(shí)點(diǎn)運(yùn)用恰當(dāng)?shù)轿唬�文中使用了非常好的短語和詞匯為文章增色不少，比如1、熱點(diǎn)話題：a hot topic  2、缺乏交通安全意識(shí)：lack awareness of traffic safety等．還運(yùn)用了一些長(zhǎng)句使得文章結(jié)構(gòu)更加嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)合理，如For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules，he or she should be punished．
和 Only in this way can we cross streets safely．等．

解答 Chinese style of crossing streets has been a hot topic on the Internet recently．（點(diǎn)明主題）
Now many people cross streets without looking at the traffic lights．Why？I think there are two main reasons．Some people lack awareness of traffic safety．Others are so busy that they don't want to wait for the green light for a while．（出現(xiàn)的原因）
However，it has brought danger to themselves as well as to others．So I hope something must be done to avoid traffic accidents．高分句型1：For example，whoever breaks the traffic rules，he or she should be punished．（作者的看法）
As middle school students，we should obey the traffic rules．What's more，I will try my best to advise people to follow the rules．高分句型2：Only in this way can we cross streets safely．（應(yīng)對(duì)措施）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 圖表類在寫作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需要積累短語和重要句型．