Question

11．如今，我們身邊不乏"低頭族"．他們在與朋友聚會、家人團聚或乘坐交通工具時，常常低頭忙于瀏覽手機．請簡要描述此現(xiàn)象，并發(fā)表你的看法．
提示詞：低頭族：phubbing
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
      2．可適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
The phenomenon that people are always phubbing is becoming more and more popular．
                                                                        

Answer 1

分析 本文屬于議論文寫作，人稱以第一人稱為主，時態(tài)為一般現(xiàn)在時．寫作要求為簡要描述"低頭族"在與朋友聚會、家人團聚或乘坐交通工具時，低頭忙于瀏覽手機的現(xiàn)象，并闡述你對此現(xiàn)象的看法．
重要詞匯：stare at （凝視，盯�。�；no matter when （whenever）；get together （聚會）；be likely to （可能…）；Worse still（更糟糕的是）；cause serious accidents （導致嚴重的事故）；throw away （丟棄，扔掉）；
高分句型：1．Some people only stare at the screens of their phones，①ignoring the people around them no matter ②when they take a bus，hold a party or even get together with their families．
                ①句子的主語Some people 與動詞ignore存在邏輯上的主謂關(guān)系，這里現(xiàn)在分詞短語作伴隨狀語；②when引導一個時間狀語從句．
                 2．①Worse still，they will not miss the chance of surfing the Internet or playing the games ②when they cross the road，③which is likely to cause serious accidents and frighten their lives．
                  3．It is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up．
                  It is high time that…后面要用虛擬語氣，所以動詞用了一般過去時threw away 和raised．
                  4．Do cherish the ones around us and appreciate the splendid scenery ahead of us．
                  助動詞do在句中表示強調(diào)，加強了語氣．
                  ①運用短語Worse still增強了文章的感染力；②when引導一個時間狀語從句；③which引導非限制性定語從句．

解答 The phenomenon that people are always phubbing is becoming more and more popular．Some people only stare at the screens of their phones，ignoring the people around them no matter when they take a bus，hold a party or even get together with their families（高分句型一）．Worse still，they will not miss the chance of surfing the Internet or playing the games when they cross the road，which is likely to cause serious accidents and frighten their lives（高分句型二）．
It is high time that we threw away the phone and raised our heads up（高分句型三）．Do cherish the ones around us and appreciate the splendid scenery ahead of us（高分句型四）．

點評 本題屬于議論文寫作，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，明確要點．2、注意將敘述、描寫等手法結(jié)合到議論中，為議論提供依據(jù)．3、注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．