Question

短文寫作

請你根據(jù)以下提示，結(jié)合生活中的一個(gè)事例，用英語寫一篇短文，談?wù)勎⑿Φ淖饔谩?/p>

The best example of universally understood body language may be the smile.A smile can help us get through difficult situation and find friends in a world of strangers.A smile can open doors and tear down walls.

注意：①無須寫標(biāo)題；

      ②內(nèi)容只需涉及一個(gè)方面；

      ③詞數(shù)為100左右。

Answer 1

One possible version

I still remember how nervous I was on my first day in the new school three years ago, when I found it difficult to follow my teacher in the first English class. The teacher spoke English throughout the class, which was totally different from the lessons I had taken before.

In the morning class, the next day, the English teacher came to me while I was reading the text aloud as other students. After listening to me for a while, she gave me a big smile and said she like my voice very much. The smile shone on my whole day and the following days. A week later, I volunteered to take charge of English study in my class.

 Thanks to the comforting smile in my first English class. I began to be confident.

解析:

【思路點(diǎn)撥】該文取自生活，又是以例子作為主打的文章，所以考生要完成作文并不難，要得高分的話，可以使用一兩個(gè)亮點(diǎn)句型，例如用否定加比較級襯托最高級，not only提前的倒裝句，插入語，形式主語和without引導(dǎo)的虛擬語氣等。能夠使用這些句式結(jié)構(gòu)首先要求考生對于這些語法要十分熟悉，其次要學(xué)會將這些語法功能化應(yīng)用于寫作�？忌鷤円�得高分，英語基礎(chǔ)十分重要，重視教材的學(xué)習(xí)，對考生備考有很大的作用。微笑的作用方方面面，可以先用總結(jié)概括性的語句談一下微笑的作用，然后選取其中一個(gè)方面立論，作為文章的第一部分；再選取一個(gè)例子緊扣主題進(jìn)行例證，作為第二部分；最后結(jié)尾的時(shí)候以點(diǎn)蓋面，將微笑的巨大作用推向一個(gè)高度，還可以進(jìn)而倡導(dǎo)多微笑，這是文章的第三部分。

【范文點(diǎn)評】本文思路清晰，首段簡介了我的新英語老師的與眾不同之處，第二段舉例佐證，第三段點(diǎn)明老師對我的影響；作者使用了still，the next day, a week later等銜接性語言，讓整個(gè)文章渾然一體；應(yīng)用了較為復(fù)雜的句子結(jié)構(gòu)，比如第一句話中使用了賓語從句，how nervous I was...，還套用了一個(gè)非限定性定語從句when I found...,以及形式賓語it使得整個(gè)句子緊湊，此外，作者還用了shine，take charge of，volunteer等吸引眼球的詞語。不失為一篇優(yōu)秀的書面表達(dá)。