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18．Shenzhen Daily 就"Health and Wealth，Which Is More Important？"在讀者中展開討論．假設(shè)你是李華，向報社投稿．請依據(jù)下列要點，適當(dāng)添加細節(jié)，寫一篇100詞左右的短文．首句已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
1．財富比健康重要．富人受人尊敬，而窮人受歧視；
2．健康勝于財富，健康的人才能享受生活；
3．你的看法．
Health and Wealth，Which Is More Important？
Some people hold the view that wealth is more important than health．
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Answer 1

分析 本文屬于提綱類作文，動筆前，一定要認真分析要點，理解要點要表達的含義，不能遺漏要點，跑題偏題．而且我們需要用正確的英語把給出的要點表達出來．本作文中給出的要點比較具體，故需要準確表達．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次．特別注意在選擇句式時要賦予變化．這就要求平時除了加強詞匯積累，寫作聯(lián)系以外，還可以適當(dāng)記憶一些類似的范文，這樣在考試中可以起到事半功倍的效果．
【亮點說明】They think that a wealthy person will be respected in this world，while a poor person will be looked down upon by others．這句話里面有賓語從句，也能正確使用連詞while，還有Only if a person enjoys good health，can he really enjoy his life．這是一個倒裝句

解答 Health and Wealth，Which Is More Important？
      Some people hold the view that wealth is more important than health．They think that a wealthy person will be respected in this world，while a poor person will be looked down upon by others．（高分句型一）Therefore，a person who tries all means to make money will be considered （to be） a hero no matter whether he is in good health or poor health．（高分句型二）
       However，the majority of people believe that health is more important than wealth．For example，a healthy scientist can achieve more success in his scientific research．Only if a person enjoys good health，can he really enjoy his life．（高分句型三）
       In my opinion，health is more important than wealth．Good health can bring us success as well as real happiness．So health is the most important thing that one has to treasure in the world．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．