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6．假定英語課上老師要求同學(xué)們交換修改作文，請(qǐng)你修改你同桌寫的以下作文．文中共有10處語言錯(cuò)誤，每句中最多有兩處．錯(cuò)誤涉及一個(gè)單詞的增加、刪除或修改．
增加：在缺詞處加一個(gè)漏字符號(hào)（∧），并在其下面寫上該加的詞．
刪除：把多余的詞用斜線（\）劃掉．
修改：在錯(cuò)的詞下劃一橫線，并在該詞下面寫上修改后的詞．
注意：1．每處錯(cuò)誤及其修改均僅限一詞
2．只允許修改10處，多者（從第11處起）不計(jì)分．
I ordered a birthday gift for my sister on the Internet three days ago．The gift whose the price is not high is a beautiful pink cup decorating with my sister's name，her date of birth，and some best wishes to her as well．It's such lovely a cup with a picture of a cartoon dog on it that both my sister and I liked it by first sight．
Besides，I am very satisfying with Alipay Security Control，which is very convenienct and safely．And I am pleased with the delivery service．I received the cup yesterday．Don't you think it's very fast？
He enjoy shopping online very much．There is no doubt that more and more people preferred to shop online nowadays．We don't need spend much time going to the shops or markets with such a good number of different choice on the Internet．

Answer 1

分析 本文主要講述作者給妹妹購買一件價(jià)格不是很高的粉色杯子，上面有妹妹的名字，出生日期及一些祝愿．作者對(duì)投遞很滿意，第一天購買，第二天就收了貨物．作者認(rèn)為不必花很多時(shí)間逛商店，在網(wǎng)上有很多選擇．

解答 I ordered a birthday gift for my sister on the Internet three days ago．The gift whose the price is not high is a beautiful pink cup decorating with my sister's name，her date of birth，and some best wishes to her as well．It's such lovely a cup with a picture of a cartoon dog on it that both my sister and I liked it by first sight．
Besides，I am very satisfying with Alipay Security Control，which is very convenient and safely．And I am pleased with the delivery service．I received the cup yesterday．Don't you think it's very fast？
He enjoy shopping online very much．There is no doubt that more and more people preferredto shop online nowadays．We don't need∧spend much time going to the shops or markets with such a good number of different choice on the Internet．
詳解：
1．去掉the 考查定語從句．分析句子結(jié)構(gòu)可知這是一個(gè)定語從句，先行詞The gift在從句中作定語，the是多余的，要去掉．
2．decorating改為decorated 考查過去分詞．cup與decorate之間是動(dòng)賓關(guān)系，用過去分詞短語作后置定語．
3．such改為so 考查固定搭配．such+a（an）+adj．+單數(shù)可數(shù)名詞+that從句；so+形容詞+a（n）+單數(shù)名詞+that從句．此處應(yīng)是后者．
4．by改為at 考查固定搭配．a(chǎn)t first sight意為"乍看之下； 一看到…就"，是固定搭配．
5．satisfying改為satisfied 考查固定搭配．be satisfied with意為"對(duì)…感到滿意"，是固定搭配．
6．safely改為safe 考查形容詞．a(chǎn)nd是并列連詞，它前后連接兩個(gè)相同的語法成分，convenient和safe都是形容詞作表語．
7．He改為I 考查代詞．全文都是用第一人稱講述事情，用I．
8 preferred改為prefer 考查動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)．本文講述的是一般事實(shí)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．
9．加to 考查動(dòng)詞不定式．此處need是實(shí)義動(dòng)詞，后接動(dòng)詞時(shí)有動(dòng)詞不定式．
10．choice改為choices 考查名詞復(fù)數(shù)．choice是可數(shù)名詞，其前有different修飾時(shí)，用復(fù)數(shù)形式．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 高考短文改錯(cuò)題的形式有說明文，短文故事，書信等，具有很強(qiáng)的實(shí)用性．短文的內(nèi)容和語言都符合高中學(xué)生的實(shí)際，從表面上看類似一篇學(xué)生習(xí)作．首先，通讀全文，了解短文大意，把握全篇的時(shí)態(tài)、人稱及行文邏輯，在通讀全文時(shí)把一些容易的錯(cuò)誤先改好，再進(jìn)行逐句改錯(cuò)．其次，要進(jìn)行逐個(gè)句子的改錯(cuò)．這是要對(duì)文中的詞法、句法和語篇著重分析和特別注意．最后把改好的短文再閱讀一遍，檢查答案是否正確，感覺是否還有不妥之處，最終形成定稿．