Question

手機(jī)在中國(guó)發(fā)展很快，擁有和使用它已成為當(dāng)今時(shí)尚。你班同學(xué)開(kāi)展了一些調(diào)查。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下表提示寫(xiě)一篇短文，介紹這次調(diào)查內(nèi)容，并且表明自己的觀點(diǎn)。

advantages	disadvantages
1．方便，可以隨時(shí)和別人聯(lián)系 2．可以獲取更多信息，娛樂(lè)放松	1．干擾正常工作和生活 2．駕車打手機(jī)很危險(xiǎn)
自己的觀點(diǎn)

注意：1．短文內(nèi)容必須覆蓋表格所有內(nèi)容，可以適當(dāng)增加，以使行文連貫；

2．短文開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；

3．詞數(shù)：100-120.

As is seen, mobile phone is used nowadays everywhere in China. Here is the survey we have made of how it is used.

Answer 1

As is seen, mobile phones are used everywhere in China. Here is the survey we have made of how they are used. On one hand, mobile phones make it convenient to keep us in touch with others. Besides, we can also have fun and get much information by surfing the Internet with it.

On the other hand, if we carry a mobile phone, we will be followed by calls and messages, which always disturbs our life and work. Worse still, it is very dangerous to answer the phone while driving.

As far as I am concerned, we should manage our mobile phones well. When having a meeting or lesson, we must turn it off so that it may not disturb us. Make sure we do not make any phone call when driving. In this way, mobile phone will be useful to our life.

【解析】

試題分析：本文為典型的議論文寫(xiě)作。圍繞手機(jī)的優(yōu)缺點(diǎn)展開(kāi)，此類寫(xiě)作較為容易把握，題目已給定大致敘述內(nèi)容，只要正確翻譯即可，注意經(jīng)典的短語(yǔ)使用以及結(jié)尾表達(dá)自己觀點(diǎn)。

范文為經(jīng)典的三段論式結(jié)構(gòu)，第一段介紹手機(jī)的優(yōu)點(diǎn)，第二段介紹手機(jī)的缺點(diǎn)，第三段點(diǎn)明自己的觀點(diǎn)。第一段第三句mobile phones make it convenient to keep us in touch with others.使用了make it…to…的句子結(jié)構(gòu)；第二段第一句if we carry a mobile phone, we will be followed by calls and messages, which always disturbs our life and work.首先使用了if領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的狀語(yǔ)從句，另使用了which領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句；第二段最后一句it is very dangerous to answer the phone while driving使用了while領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，且是省略結(jié)構(gòu)；第三段第二句When having a meeting or lesson, we must turn it off so that it may not disturb us.使用了when領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句且是省略主語(yǔ)形式，以及so that領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句；倒數(shù)第二句中Make sure we do not make any phone call when driving.使用了when領(lǐng)導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的省略形式。在短語(yǔ)使用上，使用了On one hand一方面，keep in touch with保持聯(lián)系，On the other hand另一方面，Worse still,更糟糕的是，As far as I am concerned就我而言，Make sure確保等經(jīng)典的好短語(yǔ)。在詞語(yǔ)使用上，如第一段最后一句Besides, we can also have fun and get much information by surfing the Internet with it.使用了Besides來(lái)承接上下文，連詞的運(yùn)用十分出彩。整篇文章在行文上結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)清晰，從句運(yùn)用恰到好處。總結(jié)：議論文寫(xiě)作且是對(duì)比類文章時(shí)，采用三段論，并且用on one hand…on the other hand之類的短語(yǔ)表述兩種觀點(diǎn)會(huì)使文章結(jié)構(gòu)清晰。

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