Question

6．假如你是李華，最近你在瀏覽一個(gè)新西蘭中學(xué)網(wǎng)站時(shí)，看到一位名叫Tom的中學(xué)生的留言，他計(jì)劃在暑假期間到中國(guó)的北京旅游，希望能有一名中國(guó)留學(xué)生做他的導(dǎo)游．你對(duì)此很感興趣，請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示寫(xiě)一封e-mail給他，介紹你的相關(guān)情況．
  主要內(nèi)容包括：
  1．希望做他的導(dǎo)游；    
2．打算如何給他做導(dǎo)游；    
3．期盼他的回復(fù)．
  注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；       
2．可適當(dāng)增加情節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開(kāi)頭已為你寫(xiě)好．
Dear Tom，
  Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．____________________________________________________
__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours sincerely
                                                        Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是一篇實(shí)用文，要求寫(xiě)一封電子郵件，給出的要點(diǎn)較多，只要稍加發(fā)揮想象即可．根據(jù)要求和內(nèi)容來(lái)看，包括：1．希望做他的導(dǎo)游；2．打算如何給他做導(dǎo)游；3．期盼他的回復(fù)．審題時(shí)注意因?yàn)槭侵v述自己的計(jì)劃打算，所以要使用一般將來(lái)時(shí)兼顧使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱(chēng)用第一人稱(chēng)的語(yǔ)氣表達(dá)．還應(yīng)該注意使用較高級(jí)的詞匯和句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次．注意字?jǐn)?shù)要求100詞左右．
重要短語(yǔ)：
be willing to do sth樂(lè)意做某事，be supposed to do sth應(yīng)該做某事，F(xiàn)or one thing…For another…一方面…，另一方面…，keep sb company doing sth陪伴某人做某事，places of interest風(fēng)景名勝，look forward to期待，盼望．
高分句型：
1．Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．本句中包含一個(gè)while引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句的省略用法，省略了I was；主句中含有一個(gè)省略了引導(dǎo)詞that或者which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句you posted on it．
2．I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．本句中包含一個(gè)that引導(dǎo)的同位語(yǔ)從句，是your wishes的內(nèi)容．
3．Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．這句中Learning this news為現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Dear Tom，
Recently，while browsing a senior high school website of New Zealand，I saw the message you posted on it．（高分句型）I get to know your wishes that you intend to travel in Beijing during the summer vacation with a Chinese student as your guide．（高分句型）（表達(dá)希望）
Learning this news，I am really willing to travel with you and introduce Beijing to you．（高分句型）I know as a brilliant guide I am supposed to make your journey interesting and meaningful．For one thing，I will keep you company visiting numerous great places of interest and enjoy the wonderful sightseeing．For another，I am going to tell you the long and rich history of Beijing．（說(shuō)明自己的打算）
I am looking forward to the reply from you．With all my wishes you could give me this honor．（表達(dá)期盼）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 文章結(jié)構(gòu)清楚，層次明確．使用了For one thing，F(xiàn)or another，來(lái)說(shuō)明自己做導(dǎo)游的優(yōu)勢(shì)．另外用了am supposed to，keep doing，還運(yùn)用了-ing形式作狀語(yǔ)，looking forward to；定語(yǔ)從句、同位語(yǔ)從句等短語(yǔ)和較為復(fù)雜的表達(dá)．此外With all my wishes you could give me this honor．這一經(jīng)典句子的使用也使文章語(yǔ)言更加委婉禮貌，增加了文章的亮點(diǎn)．