Question

15．假如你是高中生李華，你的朋友李明在學(xué)校住宿，他寫信告訴你他因不善于交友而苦惱．請你給他寫一封回信并提出一些建議．
要點如下：
1 要善于樂于助人；
2 多與他人交流；
3 多參加學(xué)�；顒樱�
注意：
1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．要點齊全，書寫工整．
3．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Li Ming，
                                                          

Answer 1

分析 本文是提綱類書信，假如你是高中生李華，你的朋友李明在學(xué)校住宿，他寫信告訴你他因不善于交友而苦惱．請你給他寫一封回信并提出一些建議．要點如下：1．要善于樂于助人；2．多與他人交流；3．多參加學(xué)校活動．寫作時不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫同時要把所提示的點寫全，語句通順，同時要注意準確運用時態(tài)、語態(tài)、上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系．根據(jù)句意適當使用并列連詞，同時也要合理運用高級詞匯和高級句子為文章增色添彩．注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；2．要點齊全，書寫工整．3．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
【亮點說明】語言簡練，條理清晰，采用常見的三段形式．I'm sorry to hear that you're worrying about making friends．句中運用賓語從句；If you do so，you'll  make friends easily．條件狀語從句使用得當；I do hope you will find these suggestions useful．強調(diào)謂語的運用使語氣加強；另外，F(xiàn)irst，Second，Third，使文章顯得層次分明；By doing these，communicate with，you'd better take an active part in，Therefore，Anyhow，這些單詞、詞組和句式的運用使文章顯得生動、鮮活．

解答 Dear Li Ming，
     I'm sorry to hear that you're worrying about making friends．Some tips below may be helpful to you．（高分句型）
     First，you should be friendly to others and always ready to help others．If you do so，you'll  make friends easily．（善于助人）Second，you should try to communicate with others more．It is also very important and it will make your friends understand you better．（多與他人交流）Third，you'd better take an active part in activities of your school，such as sports，games，travels，parties，etc．By doing these，you'll get more chances to communicate with other people．（高分句型）Therefore，you'll have more chances to make new friends．（多參加活動）
     I do hope you will find these suggestions useful．（高分句型）Anyhow，there're many ways to develop a good friendship．Hope you'll solve this problem and get along well with your friends．（提出希望）
     Best wishes．                                                                                                                                                                              
Yours，
Li Hua

點評 提綱類寫作的文章較開放式的文體，比較好寫．學(xué)生在寫作的過程中，首先思路要清晰，要對所表達的句子通順的說出來，遇到不會的要學(xué)會替換所用語，來達到同樣的意思．在每一篇作文中，對于表達觀點的句子，都要用上起承轉(zhuǎn)合的連詞來加強文章的層次感，適當運用俗語，運用平時常用的句式來使文章富有變化，表達地道得體．