Question

英語課上，老師向同學(xué)們介紹了2013年度“最美孝心少年”的感人事跡，你深受感動。請你用英語寫一則日記，寫出自己的感受。

內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)及要求：

1. 表明自己將向“孝心少年”學(xué)習(xí)；

2. 你將在日常生活、學(xué)習(xí)中做些什么來孝敬父母；

3. 詞數(shù)：100左右。開頭部分已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

提示詞（可選用）：learn from, respect, care for, do some housework, study hard

This morning, our English teacher told us some stories about “the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”.

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Answer 1

This morning, our English teacher told us some stories about “the most beautiful filial piety youth in 2013”. I was deeply moved by their stories. Those teenagers set us a good example in respecting and caring for parents.

I used to make my parents unhappy and they are always worried about me. Now I feel ashamed about it. I think I should learn from them. I will help do some housework and take good care of my mum and dad when they are ill. What’s more, I will try my best to study hard so that I can enter a better college. I hope I can become a filial piety youth like them. I am sure that my parents will be proud of me.

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求寫一篇日記，談?wù)劼犕辍白蠲佬⑿纳倌辍钡母腥耸论E之后的感想。寫作要點(diǎn)包括：向“孝心少年”學(xué)習(xí)；孝敬父母應(yīng)做的事情這兩個方面。詞數(shù)在100詞左右，開頭不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；注意使用提示詞；不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀；注意行文的連貫性。

亮點(diǎn)說明：范文涵蓋了所有的寫作要點(diǎn)，進(jìn)行了適當(dāng)?shù)耐卣�，并注意語句的連貫性；范文還使用了目的狀語從句、時間狀語從句、賓語從句等語法知識，具備較強(qiáng)的語言運(yùn)用能力。

語法方面：時間狀語從句when they are ill；目的狀語從句so that I can enter a better college；賓語從句①I can become a filial piety youth like them，②I should learn from them等，語法知識運(yùn)用比較嫻熟，顯示了較強(qiáng)的語法功底，也使作文句式變得多樣；

篇章結(jié)構(gòu)方面：范文注意使用and, now, what’s more等來銜接句子和段落，使表達(dá)變得更有條理；

短語和搭配方面：范文使用了set sb a good example in, care for, used to do, be worried about, feel ashamed about, learn from, take good care of, try my best to do, be sure that, be proud of等短語和搭配，使作文的內(nèi)容變得充實(shí)。

考點(diǎn)：材料類作文