Question

7．Two years ago，when I was an oversea student，I worked early mornings and late nights to pay for my school fees．
One day，I was seriously ill with a very high fever．I had stayed at home for a few days，and I had run out of food．Because I had been in this town just for a short time，I also had no friends nearby who could help．So I went out to get some food．I would have gone to the supermarket，but on this occasion，I went into a small store because it was closer．
I picked up a few items．When I handed them to the shopkeeper，she said，"You are unwell．""Yes，"I nodded．
She pointed at the salami and bread I was buying and offered，"I can make you a sandwich，so you don't have to do it yourself'．So，she made the sandwich and asked me to wait a moment．She went in the back room and returned with a bowl of hot soup．
"It will warm you up，"she said with a genuine smile．
What really warmed me up was not the soup，but her kindness．It made me want to be as kind as the shopkeeper who had been kind to me．
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1）請你以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容．
2）請你以約120個詞以"善舉的影響"為話題談?wù)勀愕南敕ǎ瑑?nèi)容包括：
（1）上文使你回憶起曾經(jīng)有誰的愛心舉動使你感到溫暖；
（2）在感到溫暖之余，你是否受到這個舉動的影響，會把這份愛心傳遞下去？為什么？
（3）進入大學(xué)校園后，你將如何繼續(xù)傳遞愛心？
[寫作要求]
你可以使用實例或其他論述方法支持你的論點，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不要抄襲閱讀材料中的句子．
When the author，an oversea student，was badly ill，a shopkeeper made him a sandwich and offered hot soup．Feeling warm with her kindness，the author decided to be as kind as her．
The passage reminds me of Miss Chen，my teacher of Chemistry，she just encouraged me not to give up．she even did everything to ease my anxiety．
It sounds like nothing big，but her act did make me feel warm．With such a teacher，there is no doubt that I will act as her in future．As long as I do so，others can also feel the kindness of Miss Chen．
When I enter a college，I will keep kindness in mind．If possible，I will try to become a youth volunteer，who offers help to other．No matter how hard it is，I will do my best to help those people in need．．

Answer 1

分析 本文是讀寫任務(wù)型寫作，這類作文可按照三段式模板寫：第一段：概況所給短文要點．第二段：過渡詞引出主題句---闡述理由．第三段：個人觀點．特別要注意第一段的概括．用自己的語言概括，不能照搬照抄原文． 時態(tài)用一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱用第一和第三人稱． 重要短語：offer sth to sb（提供某人某事），decide to do（決定做某事），remind sb of sth（提醒某人某物），encourage sb to do（鼓勵某人做某事），give up（放棄），ease one's anxiety （減輕某人的焦慮），act as（扮演，充當(dāng)），keep sth in mind（幫某事記在心里），try to do sth（努力做某事），do one's best to do sth（盡最大努力做），in need（需要），enter a college（上大學(xué)）．
【高分句型一】
1．Feeling warm with her kindness，the author decided to be as kind as her．
此處是由現(xiàn)在分詞短語"Feeling warm with her kindness"作原因狀語，主句為"the author decided to be as kind as her"，主句的主語為"the author"與動詞"feel"存在邏輯上的主動關(guān)系．
【高分句型二】
1．With such a teacher，there is no doubt that I will act as her in future．
此處是由同位語從句，結(jié)構(gòu)為"there is no doubt that+從句"，"that"引導(dǎo)的同位語從句解釋說明"doubt"的具體內(nèi)容．
【高分句型三】
2．①If possible，I will try to become a youth volunteer，②who offers help to other．
①此處是條件狀語從句中的省略，可以理解為"If it is possible"．
   ②此處是由"who"引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句，關(guān)系代詞"who"在從句中作主語，先行詞為"a youth volunteer"．
【高分句型四】
3．No matter how hard it is，I will do my best to help those people in need．
此處是由"No matter how+形容詞+主語+謂語"構(gòu)成的讓步狀語從句，也可理解為"However+形容詞+主語+謂語"，主句為"I will do my best to help those people in need"．

解答 When the author，an oversea student，was badly ill，a shopkeeper made him a sandwich and offered hot soup．Feeling warm with her kindness，the author decided to be as kind as her．【高分句型一】（概括）
   The passage reminds me of Miss Chen，my teacher of Chemistry，she just encouraged me not to give up．she even did everything to ease my anxiety．（回憶曾經(jīng)有誰的愛心舉動使你感到溫暖）
 It sounds like nothing big，but her act did make me feel warm．With such a teacher，there is no doubt that I will act as her in future．【高分句型二】As long as I do so，others can also feel the kindness of Miss Chen．（在感到溫暖之余，受到這個舉動的影響，會把這份愛心傳遞下去及原因）
   When I enter a college，I will keep kindness in mind．If possible，I will try to become a youth volunteer，who offers help to other．【高分句型三】No matter how hard it is，I will do my best to help those people in need．【高分句型四】（個人觀點：進入大學(xué)校園后，如何繼續(xù)傳遞愛心）

點評 讀寫任務(wù)型寫作是將閱讀與寫作有機結(jié)合，要求考生既能讀懂文章信息，又要依據(jù)要求規(guī)范連貫地表達內(nèi)容，其中準(zhǔn)確概括很有挑戰(zhàn)且十分重要，根據(jù)記敘文、議論文、說明文等不同文體作相應(yīng)概括，總的來說，遵循以下步驟：確定主題句；尋找關(guān)鍵詞；重構(gòu)主題句；重組支持句．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．