Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
An elephant was standing and picking leaves from a tree. A small fly came，flying and buzzing (嗡嗡叫) near his ear. The elephant waved it away with his long ears. Then the fly came again, and the elephant waved it away once more.
This was repeated several times. Then the elephant asked the fly, “Why are you so restless and noisy? Why can’t you stay for a while in one place? ”
The fly answered, “I am attracted to whatever I see, hear or smell. My five senses pull me constantly in all directions and I cannot resist them．What is your secret? How can you stay so calm and still?”
The elephant stopped eating and said, “My five senses do not rule my attention. Whatever I do, I get involved in it. Now that I am eating, I am completely absorbed in eating. In this way I can enjoy my food and chew it better. I rule and control my attention, and not the other way around. So when you are in charge of your five senses and attention, your mind will become calm too.”
【寫作內(nèi)容】
1、以約30個(gè)詞概括短文的內(nèi)容；
2、然后以約120個(gè)詞就“專注”這一主題發(fā)表你的看法，并包括以下要點(diǎn)：
（1）看完故事后的感受及啟發(fā)；
（2）描述一段你或他人因受太多干擾而使學(xué)習(xí)、生活或工作受到影響的不愉快經(jīng)歷；
（3）你打算在高二這一年里如何保持專注、專心。
【寫作要求】
1、在作文中可以使用自己親身的經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內(nèi)容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子；
2、作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱。
【評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】
概括準(zhǔn)確，語言規(guī)范，內(nèi)容合適，篇章連貫。

Answer 1

An elephant was constantly disturbed by a restless fly, who asked the elephant about the secret of remaining calm. The elephant revealed that calmness would be obtained when one’s senses and attention were focused.
After reading the story, I was inspired by what the elephant said. The ability to focus one’s attention is the key to success. Just like the fly, a person who is easily distracted by the surroundings will feel restless and tired, unable to achieve his success.
This reminds me of what happened when I entered high school as a Senior One student. I was so excited to find that there were various student organizations and after-class activities intended for us students. It seemed that many groups were suitable to me. During the first term, I was attracted whenever there was a notice from a student group. As a result, I didn’t spend enough time on my studies, nor could I settle down on my homework every day. Consequently, I failed in the final exam.
I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time. Becoming a Senior Two student, I intend to set a clear goal for myself first. Then I will give priority to what I will be doing and keep it up, trying to resist the temptation of other events. I am fully aware that only when I have a clear and determined mind can I achieve my goal in the end.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，按照要點(diǎn)去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。寫作時(shí)盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點(diǎn)說明】范文觀點(diǎn)明確，有理有據(jù)，不乏好的短語和句子：focus one’s attention 專注，the key to success.成功的關(guān)鍵，intend to do打算做，An elephant was constantly disturbed by a restless fly, who asked the elephant about the secret of remaining calm.這句話用了定語從句， After reading the story, I was inspired by what the elephant said. 這句話用了賓語從句， This reminds me of what happened when I entered high school as a Senior One student. 這句話用了賓語從句，I was so excited to find that there were various student organizations and after-class activities intended for us students. 這句話用了so….that…，During the first term, I was attracted whenever there was a notice from a student group. 這句話用了讓步狀語從句，As a result, I didn’t spend enough time on my studies, nor could I settle down on my homework every day. 這句話用了倒裝句， I have learned a lesson from this experience that one should focus on one thing at a time. 這句話用了同位語從句， Then I will give priority to what I will be doing and keep it up, trying to resist the temptation of other events.這句話用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語， I am fully aware that only when I have a clear and determined mind can I achieve my goal in the end.這句話也用了倒裝句。