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【題目】根據(jù)寫作要求，閱讀短文內(nèi)容，寫出一篇連貫完整的短文。詞數(shù)不少于60。

The Youngest Skier To The South Pole

On Friday December 9th, a 16-year-old skier, Ameba Hempleman-Adamsreached the South Pole with her father after skiing 97 miles and spending 17nights on the ice. On the final day they skied 14 miles and afterwards Ameba said she felt “elated and tired” on reaching the South Pole.

“The biggest challenges were the freezing cold and eating only dried food. The best bit has been experiencing what Dad does on expeditions (探險(xiǎn)). It’s the first time I’ve been on a difficult long journey with him and now I know what it’s like. The trip brought me closer to Dad, but I also had to put up with his snoring (鼾聲) which was terrible.”

She added, “Would I do it again? I’m not sure. I’ll have to think about that after a few nights’ sleep! At times it’s been really hard: I’ve got aching shoulders, and my back’s been sore from pulling my sledge (雪橇), I’ve got blisters (水泡) on my feet from the boots and I’ve got a cold burn on my nose from my sunglasses. 43 ”.

She said the most extraordinary part of the trip had been the breath taking scenery and the sense of isolation in the Antarctic landscape. “I’ve really missed my friends while I’ve been away and want to thank them for all their messages of support.”

Friends and relatives who posted comments on Ameba’s expedition website paid tribute (致敬) to her positive attitude which, they said, would be an inspiration to others.

Her father, David, said “Ameba has done amazing well. I’m proud of her. She showed real determination. She was tough and she pulled her sledge the whole way. It was a special experience to share those 97 miles with her.”

假如你是建華中學(xué)的學(xué)生王新，在網(wǎng)上看到了Ameba的故事，決定給她寫封郵件，交流分享你的想法。內(nèi)容包括：1. 你對(duì)她的旅行有何看法并說明原因；2. 分享你的旅行經(jīng)歷。

Dear Amelia,

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Yours,

Wang Xin

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Amalia:

I am deeply impressed by your adventure experience. As a girl of your age, I admire your courage and bravery. I also have an experience. It may not be as quarter as yours, but very unforgettable.

Last winter vacation, I went to Iceland with my parents, which is famous for the Northern Lights. But since they are the solar activity, seeing it or not depends on luck and the weather. It was freezing to death that night, so we all dressed like astronauts. Staring at the sky, we could see nothing but stars in the darkness. Feeling cold and hopeless, I was thinking of going back to our hotel. My father and mother hugged me to keep us warm and encouraged me to go on waiting. The Northern Lights appeared at last. They were as dancing lights high in the sky and varied in colour, green, purple, red, pink, orange and blue. Once you see them, you can’t get them out of your mind.

Hope we can travel together one day. (173w)

【解析】

這是一篇應(yīng)用文，按照要求寫封郵件。

第一步：審題。審題的目的是獲取重要信息。通過審題我們可以確定幾個(gè)方面的信息。假如你是建華中學(xué)的學(xué)生王新，在網(wǎng)上看到了Ameba的故事，決定給她寫封郵件，交流分享你的想法。內(nèi)容包括：1. 你對(duì)她的旅行有何看法并說明原因；2. 分享你的旅行經(jīng)歷。人稱為第一人稱。時(shí)態(tài)以一般過去時(shí)為主。

第二步：布局段落，確定主要段落，次要段落，段落數(shù)量。這篇寫作段落數(shù)量為三段。第一段，對(duì)Ameba的旅行有何看法并說明原因。第二段，分享你的旅行經(jīng)歷。第三段，總結(jié)或期望。

第三步：確定關(guān)鍵詞匯和短語: be deeply impressed by；be famous for ；depend on；nothing but；vary in ；out of one’s mind等。

第四步：連句成文，注意使用恰當(dāng)?shù)倪B接詞進(jìn)行過渡銜接；注意書寫，保持卷面整潔，避免劃線，亂擦。