Question

假如你是高三學(xué)生李華，近期你們學(xué)校組織一次關(guān)于“有煩惱向誰(shuí)說(shuō)”的調(diào)查活動(dòng)，調(diào)查結(jié)果如下表所示。請(qǐng)用英語(yǔ)簡(jiǎn)要介紹一下調(diào)查結(jié)果及理由并談?wù)勛约旱南敕ā?br />
注意：
1、詞數(shù)150左右；開頭已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
2、可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫。
Recently a survey—Who Do You Turn to When You Are in Trouble?
—was carried out in our school.
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Answer 1

Recently a survey—“whom do you turn to when in trouble？”was carried out in our school．Here are the results. Most of the students, about 60%,turn to their classmates or friends for help when they have problems. They think it is easier for them to communicate with  each other because they are the same age. One third of the students like to tell their troubles to their teachers or parents who  have rich experience  and are worthy of their trust. Only 10% of the students solve their problems all by themselves. They are unwilling to talk to others and are not able to get along with their classmates. They have few friends.
As far as I am concerned, I prefer to go to my parents for advice and  help，since they know me well. Besides this, they can also provide me with some practical suggestions.

試題分析：這是一篇給類似調(diào)查報(bào)告的作文，也是提綱類作文，主要內(nèi)容已經(jīng)給出，就是讓我們有煩惱都向誰(shuí)來(lái)訴說(shuō)。給材料作文的寫作首先要做到的就是不遺漏要點(diǎn)，如是反映要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容。再就是應(yīng)該注意表述的邏輯性和條理性。盡量用簡(jiǎn)單的語(yǔ)言來(lái)表述。我們首先要認(rèn)真閱讀調(diào)查結(jié)果，羅列出要點(diǎn)，確認(rèn)寫作應(yīng)用的時(shí)態(tài)，人稱及主要單詞，短語(yǔ)或固定的句型結(jié)構(gòu)。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】They think it is easier for them to communicate with  each other because they are the same age. 這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)，One third of the students like to tell their troubles to their teachers or parents who  have rich experience  and are worthy of their trust.這句話用了定語(yǔ)從句和詞組be worthy of sth， They are unwilling to talk to others and are not able to get along with their classmates. 這句話用了be unwilling to do，和get along with兩個(gè)詞組， I prefer to go to my parents for advice and help，since they know me well. 這句話用了原因狀語(yǔ)從句，還有范文還使用了As far as I am concerned, Besides this,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。。