Question

1．A man realized he needed to purchase a hearing aid．And he went to a store．"How much do they cost？"he asked the clerk．
"That depends，"said the salesman．"They range from US2toUS2，000．"
As he was unwilling to spend a lot of money on it，the man was interested in the US2model，andasked，"CanIhavealookattheUS2model？"
The clerk put the device around the man's neck．"You just stick this button in your ear and run this little string down to your pocket，"he instructed．
"How does it work？"the man asked．
"For US$2，it doesn't work，"the salesman replied．"But when people see it on you，they will pay attention．And listen to you!"
As we all know，most communication problems are not due to people talking too softly．Unfortunately，it is because we are not always good listeners．
Do you know that people will pay hundreds of dollars an hour，for no other reason than to have someone listen to them？We all need someone to listen to us，and to listen well to people is to respond to a great human need．
[寫作內(nèi)容]
1．以約30個詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容．
2．以約120個詞談?wù)?傾聽的作用"，內(nèi)容包括：
（1）這則故事帶給你的啟示；
（2）通過事例或你的經(jīng)歷闡述傾聽的重要性；
（3）我們應(yīng)該怎樣有效地進(jìn)行交流．
[寫作要求]
1．作文中可以使用親身經(jīng)歷或虛構(gòu)的故事，但不得直接引用原文中的句子．
2．作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱．
Through the story of a man buying a hearing aid that doesn‘t work just to make people pay attention to him，the passage shows that nowadays people seldom spend time listening to others．
AfterI readthe story，it struck me that we should spend more time listening to others--one of the most important things that we can do in communication．
Listening to others brings about better understanding．I learned that from my mother．Once she took me to lunch； instead of asking questions about my grades and school life，she just sat there and listened to me attentively．She told me that through my words she saw my desire and determination．Her listening made me feel understood，which has improved our relationship．
Therefore，mastering the art of listening will contribute to effective communication with others．Let‘s take the opportunity to remember what really matters and communicate with others from the heart．．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型：
句型一：
 After I read the story，it struck me that （1）we should spend more time listening（2）to others．讀完這個故事，我突然領(lǐng)悟到我們應(yīng)該花更多的時間傾聽他人．
（1）It struck/hit/occurred to sb．that表示"某人突然想到…"，其中it 是形式主語，that引導(dǎo)的是主語從句．
（2）spend some time doing sth表示"花時間做…"
句型二：
Her listening made me feel understood，which has improved our relationship．她的傾聽讓我覺得被理解，這改善了我們之間的關(guān)系．
which引導(dǎo)了非限制性定語從句，指代整個主句．
句型三：
mastering the art of listening（1）will contribute to （2）effective communication with others．掌握傾聽的藝術(shù)有助于與他人有效地進(jìn)行交流．
（1）mastering the art of listening為動名詞做主語．
（2）contribute to促進(jìn)，導(dǎo)致

解答 Through the story of a man buying a hearing aid that doesn‘t work just to make people pay attention to him，the passage shows that nowadays people seldom spend time listening to others（短文概括）．
    After I read the story，it struck me that we should spend more time listening to others【高分句型一】--one of the most important things that we can do in communication（啟示）．
    Listening to others brings about better understanding．I learned that from my mother．Once she took me to lunch； instead of asking questions about my grades and school life，she just sat there and listened to me attentively．She told me that through my words she saw my desire and determination．Her listening made me feel understood，which has improved our relationship【高分句型二】（傾聽的事例）．
    Therefore，mastering the art of listening will contribute to effective communication with others【高分句型三】．Let‘s take the opportunity to remember what really matters and communicate with others from the heart（通過傾聽進(jìn)行有效交流）．

點(diǎn)評 寫作時首先審題要到位：審體裁、人稱和時態(tài)；審要點(diǎn)．其次要考慮高分詞語和句型的選用，從句、非謂語動詞、倒裝、強(qiáng)調(diào)句型等都是可考慮的高級句型；詞語和句型的選用要包含作者的感情色彩和增強(qiáng)表達(dá)的氣勢；再次，運(yùn)用關(guān)聯(lián)詞如besides、what's  more、moreover、for one thing …for another等，使文字更加流暢．