Question

6．假如你是李明，最近，你的朋友張華因考試不利，情緒低落，學(xué)習(xí)消極應(yīng)付．請你用英語給他寫一封e-mail，指出其消極行為可能帶來的不良后果，并結(jié)合自身實際，提出應(yīng)采取的積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對方法，鼓勵他努力學(xué)習(xí)．
詞數(shù)：100左右．
Dear Zhang Hua，
I'm sorry to hear that …
      ．
Yours truly，
Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，給朋友張華寫一封e-mail．指出其情緒低落，學(xué)習(xí)消極應(yīng)付的消極行為可能帶來不良后果，并提出應(yīng)采取的積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對方法，鼓勵他努力學(xué)習(xí)．
寫作時人稱以第一和第二人稱為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時為主．
寫作要點：1．開頭-問候； 2．告知比賽相關(guān)事宜：比賽時間；報名時間；報名地點；參賽內(nèi)容；獲獎辦法；3．結(jié)尾．
重要短語：do well in（做得好），try one's best （盡某人最大的努力），end up with a failure（以失敗而告終），tend to do （有做某事的傾向），lose one's confidence（失去信心），be left far behind（被落下），in face of（面臨），calme down（鎮(zhèn)定，冷靜），ask sb for advice（向某人尋求幫助），stick to（堅持），step by step（逐步地），be of some help to sb（對某人有幫助）．
【高分句型一】
1．You are not the only one who seems to try his best but end up with a failure in exams．
此處是由關(guān)系代詞"who"引導(dǎo)的定語從句，先行詞為"the only one"，關(guān)系代詞"who"在定語從句中做主語．
【高分句型二】
2．In face of failure，①what we need to do is ②to calme down and reflect our learning methods and make some possible changes or to ask the teachers for advice．
①此處是由"what"引導(dǎo)的主語從句，"what"在主語從句中作"賓語"．
②此處是由"and"連接的幾個并列的不定式作表語．
【高分句型三】
3．Only by sticking to studying persistently can we make progress step by step till success．
此處是部分倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)，結(jié)構(gòu)為"Only+【狀語成分：介詞短語/when、if引導(dǎo)的從句/時間副詞】+一般疑問句形式"．

解答 Dear Zhang Hua，
I'm sorry to hear that you didn't do well in your last exam．You are not the only one who
seems to try his best but end up with a failure in exams．【高分句型一】Quite a number of students feel the same way as you and they tend to lose their confidence and don't want to study hard any longer．I'm sure you know that it's unwise to do so because you might be left far behind．（消極行為可能帶來不良后果）
   I was once in the same situation as yours．Failure is the mother of success．In face of failure，what we need to do is to calme down and reflect our learning methods and make some possible changes or to ask the teachers for advice．【高分句型二】（應(yīng)采取的積極態(tài)度和應(yīng)對方法）
Anyway，Rome is not built a day．Only by sticking to studying persistently can we make progress step by step till success．【高分句型三】I truly hope I can be of some help to you．（結(jié)尾）

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準(zhǔn)確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．