Question

【題目】隨著社會的發(fā)展，網(wǎng)絡(luò)的流行，許多網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明用語也在網(wǎng)上流傳開來。假定你是李華，最近學校的校報正在征集英文稿件，請你就“網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明用語”話題寫一篇英文稿件，內(nèi)容要點如下：

1. 現(xiàn)狀；

2. 危害（損害網(wǎng)絡(luò)環(huán)境，影響身心健康等)；

3. 提出建議（遠離不文明用語，共創(chuàng)網(wǎng)絡(luò)文明環(huán)境等）。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100左右；

2. 參考詞匯：網(wǎng)絡(luò)環(huán)境the Internet environment不文明的uncivilized

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Answer 1

【答案】With the development of society, more and more people become addicted to the Internet and like chatting online. As a result, lots of uncivilized words come into being, which does great harm to our society. On one hand, they damage the environment of the Internet civilization. On the other hand, they influence teenagers’ physical and mental health, which will have a bad effect on their development.

As high school students, we need to take measures to solve the problem. Firstly, we should call for our classmates and friends to keep away from them and express our ideas politely. Secondly, we should report this problem to the government to ask for some help. Let’s work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere.

【解析】本文是材料作文。寫提綱式作文要注意以下幾點。

　1．審題，弄清題意，確定文章的主題，并圍繞中心思想組織材料。

　2．進行構(gòu)思，列出簡單的提綱，安排好層次段落，鋪設(shè)好過渡，處理好開頭和結(jié)尾。

3．擴展成文。擴展成文時還需要確保提綱中段落結(jié)構(gòu)的思路與各段主題句的一致性。靈活運用各種句式，如倒裝句、強調(diào)句、省略句、主從復(fù)合句、分詞短語、介詞短語等，從而增加文章的可讀性。注意使用高級框架結(jié)構(gòu)的句子，讓文章的結(jié)構(gòu)錯落有致。避免只是用一兩個句式或重復(fù)用同一詞語。用好連接詞，注意段落間、句子間的連貫性。

亮點：本文內(nèi)容完整，層次分明，思路清晰，文字連貫，前后表達渾然一體。

本文第一段中指出網(wǎng)絡(luò)的現(xiàn)狀時用了一個由which引導的非限制性定語從句（圍繞中心思想組織材料）。接著陳述造成的危害時，用連詞“on one hand….on the other hand….”把網(wǎng)絡(luò)不文明的危害敘述的清晰明了，同時又運用了一個非限制性定語從句（…, which will have a bad effect on their development.），定語從句的運用讓文章更加靈活多變。運用了大量的高級詞匯，如“With the development of society，become addicted to，as a result，do great harm to…，physical and mental health，have a bad effect on their development”增添了文章的色彩。

第二段中提出自己的建議。在本段中運用連詞（Firstly…secondlly）把自己的兩個建議連接起來，最后用一個祈使句（Let’s work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere.）來呼吁大家共同努力創(chuàng)造一個和平而文明的網(wǎng)絡(luò)氛圍。在本句中運用了大量的高級詞匯，如take measures to d…； solve the problem；keep away from；work together to create a peaceful and civilized network atmosphere，讓文章更加有可讀性。