Question

10．以"Smoking"為題目寫一篇短文，詞數(shù)100左右，內(nèi)容要求包括：
1．現(xiàn)狀：中國吸煙者約占總?cè)丝诘囊话�，吸煙者越來越年輕，甚至有少數(shù)中學(xué)生也在抽煙．
2．原因：有人認(rèn)為是時(shí)髦（ a kind of fashion ），有的人認(rèn)為是樂趣，有的人認(rèn)為可以提神（refresh oneself）．
3．害處：吸煙有害健康．特別是對(duì)未發(fā)育成熟的中學(xué)生，可導(dǎo)致多種疾病，也是一種金錢的浪費(fèi)．
4：勸告大家不要吸煙．
Smoking．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息"Smoking"為話題展開寫作．寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：現(xiàn)狀：中國吸煙者約占總?cè)丝诘囊话�，吸煙者越來越年輕，甚至有少數(shù)中學(xué)生也在抽煙．原因：有人認(rèn)為是時(shí)髦（ a kind of fashion ），有的人認(rèn)為是樂趣，有的人認(rèn)為可以提神（refresh oneself）．害處：吸煙有害健康．特別是對(duì)未發(fā)育成熟的中學(xué)生，可導(dǎo)致多種疾病，也是一種金錢的浪費(fèi)．勸告大家不要吸煙．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：in public places在公共場(chǎng)所；a kind of fashion一種時(shí)尚；refresh themselves振奮自我；does great harm to對(duì)…有害；give up smoking戒煙
It's said that in China nearly half of the population are smokers．（高分句型）
It does great harm to people's health and causes a lot of diseases，such as lung cancer．（高分句型）

解答 One possible version：
Smoking Is Harmful!
You can see smokers everywhere in public places，and you can find that most of them are young people，even middle school students．It's said that in China nearly half of the population are smokers．（高分句型）
Why do so many people smoke？Some think smoking is a kind of fashion； some think smoking is a pleasure； while others believe they can refresh themselves by smoking．In fact，smoking is a very bad habit．It does great harm to people's health and causes a lot of diseases，such as lung cancer．（高分句型）So smoking is a waste of money．Besides，many fires are caused by careless smokers．
I do hope people can give up smoking．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感．（1）認(rèn)真審題，確定體裁． （2）構(gòu)思要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達(dá)的要點(diǎn)．設(shè)計(jì)好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時(shí)態(tài)、人稱等，把要點(diǎn)串聯(lián)起來，構(gòu)成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認(rèn)真檢查，避免錯(cuò)誤．仔細(xì)閱讀全文，查找是否有錯(cuò)，注意時(shí)態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標(biāo)點(diǎn)是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．