Question

17．假設(shè)你是高三學(xué)生李津，你的加拿大筆友Daniel來信向你求助．他最近和媽媽鬧矛盾，因?yàn)閶寢尣蛔屗�過多上網(wǎng)．他對此很不理解．請你給他寫一封回信，要點(diǎn)如下：
（1）建議他向媽媽道歉；
（2）說明過多上網(wǎng)的危害；
（3）列舉一些健康的休閑方式．
注意：（1）詞數(shù)不少于100；
（2）可適當(dāng)加入細(xì)節(jié)，使內(nèi)容充實(shí)，行文連貫；
（3）開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Daniel，
I'm very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction．′In my opinion，you should apologize to your mother，as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction．（向媽媽道歉） Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life，we can't ignore its harm to us．Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others，which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world．（高分句型一）（上網(wǎng)的危害）
As students，we should devote our energy to study，when available，you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games．（高分句型二）Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily．（高分句型三）（健康的生活方式）

Yours，
Li Jin．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息給李津?qū)懸环饣匦�，寫作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：（1）建議他向媽媽道歉；（2）說明過多上網(wǎng)的危害；（3）列舉一些健康的休閑方式． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應(yīng)該用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：In my opinion以我的觀點(diǎn)來看；prevent…from 阻止…免受；play an important role in在…方面起重要作用；result in導(dǎo)致；keep fit 保持健康；as well as也，還
      Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others，which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world．（高分句型一）
         As students，we should devote our energy to study，when available，you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games．（高分句型二）
       Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Daniel，
     I'm very sorry to hear that a conflict occurred between you and your mother because of your Internet addiction．
     In my opinion，you should apologize to your mother，as she has done nothing wrong to prevent you from Internet addiction．（向媽媽道歉） Although the Internet plays an important role in modern life，we can't ignore its harm to us．Many students spend most of their time playing computer games or chatting aimlessly with others，which may not only result in poor health but also lead to decline in study as well as loss of communication in the real world．（高分句型一）（上網(wǎng)的危害）
     As students，we should devote our energy to study，when available，you may as well walk outside with your friends or take some exercise to keep fit instead of playing online games．（高分句型二）Only in this way can you live and study happily and healthily．（高分句型三）（健康的生活方式）
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Jin

點(diǎn)評 英語寫作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫作過程中綜合運(yùn)用語言的能力．在撰寫時(shí)要注意主謂語一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．