Question

9．21世紀(jì)英文報(bào)社準(zhǔn)備舉辦英語(yǔ)夏令營(yíng)，開(kāi)設(shè)了如下課程：街舞（hiphop），烹飪（cooking），武術(shù)（Kung fu），護(hù)理（nursing）．假如你是王曉華，寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信給編輯，報(bào)名參加其中一門(mén)課程的學(xué)習(xí)．信的內(nèi)容必須包括：
1、你感興趣的課程；
2、你期望從這門(mén)課程中學(xué)到什么；
3、為什么想學(xué)這些內(nèi)容．
注窻：1、文章詞數(shù)為120詞左右；
2、信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)． Dear editor，
I am very glad that the English Summer Camp will be held，which consists of many courses，such as hiphop，cooking，Kung fu，nursing and so on．______ __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Yours，
Wang Xiaohua．

Answer 1

分析 本文屬于提綱類(lèi)寫(xiě)作，根據(jù)所提供的材料給編輯部寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信，寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)包括：1、你感興趣的課程；2、你期望從這門(mén)課程中學(xué)到什么；3、為什么想學(xué)這些內(nèi)容．
寫(xiě)作時(shí)以第一人稱(chēng)為主，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主要時(shí)態(tài)．
重點(diǎn)詞匯：dreamt of （夢(mèng)想）；For one thing…，F(xiàn)or another…（一方面…，另一方面…）；to take good care of （好好照顧）；As is known to all（眾所周知）；devote…to（將…奉獻(xiàn)給）；making full use of （充分利用）
高分句型：1．For one thing，I hope to gain a bit more knowledge of nursing so that it can help me to major in nursing after attending college．For another，learning more about nursing can help to take good care of my parents and relatives．
                運(yùn)用"For one thing…，F(xiàn)or another…"使表達(dá)更加清晰有層次．
                 2．①Nursing is a difficult task in fact，②because it needs a lot of patience and skills． 
                  ①動(dòng)名詞短語(yǔ)作主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)；②because引導(dǎo)一個(gè)原因狀語(yǔ)從句．

解答 Dear Editor，
I am very glad that the English Summer Camp will be held，which consists of many courses，such as hip-hop，cooking，kung fu and nursing．I want to attend the course about nursing，because I have always dreamt of becoming a nurse since I was a little child．
For one thing，I hope to gain a bit more knowledge of nursing so that it can help me to major in nursing after attending college．For another，learning more about nursing can help to take good care of my parents and relatives（高分句型一）．
As is known to all，there are many senior citizens in China．Therefore，I want to devote my life to looking after them after I graduate from college．Nursing is a difficult task in fact，because it needs a lot of patience and skills（高分句型二）．So I hope I can learn some basic knowledge of nursing by making full use of this chance．
Yours，
Wang Xiaohua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否覆蓋了所給要點(diǎn)．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，使得上下文意思連貫，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，使文章淺顯易懂，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次．