Question

假如你是李華，你的筆友Andrew 從電視上得知前段時(shí)間北京的多個(gè)地方出現(xiàn)霧霾(haze) ，非常擔(dān)心，寫(xiě)E-mail 詢問(wèn)有關(guān)情況，請(qǐng)你作出回復(fù)�；貜�(fù)應(yīng)包括以下要點(diǎn)：

實(shí)況描述；

對(duì)生活造成的影響；

成因簡(jiǎn)析與教訓(xùn)；

你個(gè)人的情況。

注意：1.可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

2. 詞數(shù)100-120左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Andrew,

Thank you very much for your concern.

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Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Andrew, 

Thank you very much for your concern. 

Last month, several places in Beijing were blanketed with thick yellow fog. Everything around disappeared from our sight. Some highways were closed. Traffic jams were commonly seen in the streets. Many people especially children and senior citizens found it difficult to breathe. As a result, local hospitals were crowded with people who had problems with their noses and lungs. Part of the cause was the dry weather but the severely damaged environment contributed a lot to this nightmare.

Personally, I didn’t get any health problems in the haze because I stayed mostly indoors. But to make a significant change, we really have to do more to protect our environment. To live a better life, we have to push on with economy, but it wound be meaningless if we have to achieve it at the cost of our breathing air.

Yours,

Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本書(shū)面表達(dá)是一篇提綱作文。提綱作文寫(xiě)作的時(shí)候注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確有哪些要點(diǎn)。2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象。要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)。3、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)；語(yǔ)言表達(dá)要符合英語(yǔ)習(xí)慣。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，比如be blanketed with，As a result，be crowded with，What’s more, at the cost of；運(yùn)用who引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句。并注意了句子的銜接如：but，because，if，before等等。

考點(diǎn)：提綱類(lèi)寫(xiě)作