Question

11．假設你是紅星中學高中學生李華，最近，你校學生會對影響學生課外閱讀的因素進行了調查，結果見下圖．請根據(jù)圖示提供的信息給某英文報紙寫信，反映調查的實際情況，并尋求建議．
注意：
1．信的開頭已為你寫好．
2．詞數(shù)不少于60．
Dear Editor，
Our student union has recently conducted a survey on what may affect students outside-class reading．
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Sincerely yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于圖表類作文，根據(jù)提示信息討論影響學生課外閱讀的因素，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個要點：分別從圖書館開放時間，課業(yè)負擔重，書價格高，家長不支持幾個方面來討論該話題 2、圖表是文章的總體框架，要在圖表的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)；就本文而言應該用一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：conduct a survey 進行調查as follows 如下take up 占據(jù)be satisfied with…對…滿意given…考慮到

解答 Dear Editor，
Our student union has recently conducted a survey on what affects students'after-class reading．The result is as follows：
72% of the students think that schoolwork takes up most of their time，leaving very little time for after-class reading．（高分句型） Meanwhile，16% complain that their parents do not support them enough．Parents are concerned that their children's attention may be taken away by the non-school related reading．（高分句型）
Besides，8% of the students are not satisfied with the opening hour of the library and the limited book collections there．And 4% of the students think books are too expensive nowadays，so they can't afford to read as much as they want．（高分句型）
We all know that reading is beneficial．However，given the facts above，how can we read more？I would appreciate your advice very much on how to encourage our reading．（高分句型）
Sincerely yours，
Li Hua

點評 應該注意適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當選用表示因果、遞進、轉折關系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復使用句式相同的簡單句而造成的單調感．（1）認真審題，確定體裁． （2）構思要點．根據(jù)題目要求，理解要表達的要點．設計好文章的層次段落，考慮所用時態(tài)、人稱等，把要點串聯(lián)起來，構成文章框架．（3）選詞造句，避難選易．（4）認真檢查，避免錯誤．仔細閱讀全文，查找是否有錯，注意時態(tài)、單詞拼寫、字母大小寫、標點是否有誤，句式是否正確．邏輯是否一致．