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1．假如你是李華，你們學校最近開展了創(chuàng)建"平安校園"活動．你們班為  此要組織一次主題班會，請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，談一談你對創(chuàng)建"平安校園"的一些想法．短文應包括下面的內容．
1．安全意識的重要；
2．運動時要注意安；
3．在校內要注意人身安全；
4．同學之間發(fā)生矛盾時，一定要保持冷靜、理智．
注意：1．不能逐條翻譯；2．詞數(shù)．100左右；3．文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
Safety at School
My dear classmates，
There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our life．Recently our school has carried out a program  aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on．

Answer 1

分析 假如你是李華，你們學校最近開展了創(chuàng)建"平安校園"活動．你們班為此要組織一次主題班會，請你用英語寫一篇發(fā)言稿，談一談你對創(chuàng)建"平安校園"的一些想法．短文應該包括下面的內容：1．安全意識的重要性；2．在校內要注意人身安全；3．運動時要注意安全；4．同學之間發(fā)生矛盾時，一定要保持冷靜、理智．寫作時不要逐句翻譯，可適當增加細節(jié)以使行文連貫．要把所提示的點寫全，語句通順，同時要注意準確運用時態(tài)、語態(tài)、上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系．根據句意適當使用并列連詞，同時也要合理運用高級詞匯和高級句子為文章增色添彩．注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右；2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；3．文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
【亮點說明】There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life．there be句型和同位語從句的結合；I consider this as indeed a good practice，which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life，whether when we stay at school or outside it．非限制性定語從句、賓語從句和whether---or引導的讓步狀語從句完美結合；When we are doing sports，we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt．句中使用了時間狀語從句；Furthermore，when we get into trouble with our classmates，we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting，which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically．時間狀語從句和非限制性定語從句在同一句中出現(xiàn)，另外Furthermore的運用也很到位；As far as I'm concerned，I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the"safety at school"activity in mind．運用了As far as I'm concerned，這樣的方式狀語從句；Besides，we are supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment．運用了where引導的定語從句．

解答 My dear classmates，
There is no denying that safety plays an important part in our daily life．（高分句型）Recently our school has carried out a program aimed at making our campus a safe place to stay on．
I consider this as indeed a good practice，which will make us aware that safety should always come first in our daily life，whether when we stay at school or outside it．（高分句型） When we are doing sports，we should attach importance to the safety and avoid being hurt．Furthermore，when we get into trouble with our classmates，we should remain calm and avoid any form of fighting，which may only bring suffering and pain to us mentally and physically．（高分句型）
As far as I'm concerned，I feel all the students and teachers should work hard and creatively to keep the"safety at school"activity in mind．（高分句型）Besides，we are supposed to observe the law discipline where we are at any moment．（高分句型）

點評 提綱類寫作的文章較開放式的文體，比較好寫．學生在寫作的過程中，首先思路要清晰，要對所表達的句子通順的說出來，遇到不會的要學會替換所用語，來達到同樣的意思．在每一篇作文中，對于表達觀點的句子，都要用上起承轉合的連詞來加強文章的層次感，適當運用俗語，運用平時常用的句式來使文章富有變化，表達地道得體．