Question

孩子的成長和教育是社會熱議的話題，現(xiàn)今父母包攬一切、孩子過度依賴等現(xiàn)象十分嚴重。請閱讀下面的漫畫，按要求用英文寫一篇短文。
內(nèi)容要求：
1．描述漫畫內(nèi)容；
2．分析漫畫所揭示的問題；
3．提出你的看法。

注意：
1．短文開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
2．考生可適當發(fā)揮，使文章內(nèi)容充實、連貫；
3．詞數(shù)120-150左右;
4．文中不能出現(xiàn)考生的具體信息。
參考詞匯：紅地毯red carpet     鋪路pave the way 
From the picture, we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet．
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                
                                                                                

Answer 1

One possible version：
From the picture we can see a family of three walking on a long red carpet .The son , well dressed waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet ,sweating .
It shows a common phenomenon nowadays that children are the focus of families , shouldering the hope of their parents .Parents arrange everything for their children and spare no effort to pave the way for their success .As a consequence , children become so reliant on their parents that they have no independent thought or creative ideas .
Such a situation is of great concern .In my opinion , overprotection and too much care are extremely bad for children’s development . Instead of doing everything for them , parents should encourage their children to overcome difficulties and inspire them to develop by themselves .Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful .

試題分析：看圖作文主要屬于記敘、描寫或說明方面的文章。寫作前要看懂圖畫，確定寫作要點，然后寫成合乎要求的短文。一般來說圖片作文分為三個部分。1簡述圖片。針對每幅圖片寫一至兩個句子，也就是就事論事進行看圖說話。2發(fā)表感想。就每幅圖片或整體主題發(fā)表自己的一些看法。3簡短結論。最后用一至兩個簡短句子進行小結，起到畫龍點睛的作用。本圖所展示的是父母過度包攬孩子一切，孩子過渡依賴父母的問題。根據(jù)文章對內(nèi)容的要求，在謀篇布局時可以使用三段式。除了注意以上問題外，還要盡量使用高級詞匯，而且也要注意多種句式的交錯使用，以使增加文章的亮點。此外，因為內(nèi)容是反映社會現(xiàn)象，所以在時態(tài)方面要使用一般現(xiàn)在時。
【亮點說明】本篇范文采用經(jīng)典的三段式，結構清晰，層次分明，要點全面。在結構安排上作者在文章首段作者先描述圖片內(nèi)容；然后在第二段提出這種社會現(xiàn)象；第三段發(fā)表自己的觀點。在語言表達上作者使用了大量復雜的長句，比如The son , well dressed waves proudly in the middle while the father behind bends forward to hold the jacket and the mother in front rolls out the carpet ,sweating .增強了文章的信息含量，顯示了作者對語言的駕馭能力。作者還用到了倒裝句Only in this way can they grow up to be independent and become truly successful 。此外，短語as a consequence , in my opinion 的使用既避免了長句所帶來的冗長，枯燥，使文章長短句結合，也有效地起到承上啟下的連接作用，這都成為了文章的亮點。