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11．假設(shè)你是李華，看到你們社區(qū)招募暑假照顧老人的廣告．你對(duì)此工作表示感興趣，希望得到機(jī)會(huì)去照顧老人．請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面的要點(diǎn)，給社區(qū)負(fù)責(zé)人寫(xiě)一封求職信．
寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．你對(duì)這份工作的認(rèn)識(shí)；
2．你有什么優(yōu)勢(shì)；
3．你的計(jì)劃．
注意：
1．詞數(shù)100左右；
2．不要逐條翻譯，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Sir，
I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board andI hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）Therefore，it is important for them to realize that they aren't ignored and there is someone who cares for them．
In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）I will go to visit them every day，chatting with them and doing some chores for them．Besides，because I have learned how to play the guitar，I will sing songs with them and play the guitar for them．
I'm looking forward to your reply in time．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你是李華，看到你們社區(qū)招募暑假照顧老人的廣告．你對(duì)此工作表示感興趣，希望得到機(jī)會(huì)去照顧老人．請(qǐng)結(jié)合下面的要點(diǎn)，給社區(qū)負(fù)責(zé)人寫(xiě)一封求職信．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：你對(duì)這份工作的認(rèn)識(shí)；你有什么優(yōu)勢(shì)；你的計(jì)劃． 2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)physically and emotionally身體上和精神上；Therefore因此；care for 關(guān)心；In order to以便，為了；apply for申請(qǐng)；Besides另外；look forward to盼望；in time及時(shí)；
 I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board and I hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
  Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）
 In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Sir，
       I have read the advertisement on the neighborhood board and I hope to get the opportunity to serve the old in my summer vacation．（高分句型一）
       Many old people are now living alone and they desire care from others physically and emotionally，especially when the summer is coming．（高分句型二）Therefore，it is important for them to realize that they aren't ignored and there is someone who cares for them．
      In order to help them spend the hot days，I apply for the job because I am now 18 years old and have a strong sense of responsibility for others．（高分句型三）I will go to visit them every day，chatting with them and doing some chores for them．Besides，because I have learned how to play the guitar，I will sing songs with them and play the guitar for them．
      I am looking forward to your reply in time．
                                     
Yours sincerely
Li Hua
 

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．