Question

假設(shè)你叫李華，欲與來(lái)自本校不同班級(jí)的另外4名同學(xué)組建一支樂(lè)隊(duì)，但缺乏經(jīng)驗(yàn)，請(qǐng)就以下情況或問(wèn)題給知名音樂(lè)人卡曾斯（Cousins）先生發(fā)一封電子郵件，以尋求幫助。
1. 成員中有三名男生和兩名女生，均喜歡流行音樂(lè)與現(xiàn)代舞蹈；
2. 每周周末排練是否足夠？初期演唱的音樂(lè)宜多元化還是一種風(fēng)格？
3. 怎樣獲得較多的表演機(jī)會(huì)？
4. 希望他能為樂(lè)隊(duì)取個(gè)名字。
注意：1. 詞數(shù)：100左右；2. 可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，使行文連貫；3. e-mail的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，但不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。
Dear Mr. Cousins,
Since you are a well-known musician,
Best wishes

Answer 1

Dear Mr. Cousins,
Since you are a well-known musician, I’m writing this e-mail to ask you for some advice on how to form a band. I, together with two boys and two girls in different classes in our school, want to form a band. We are all fond of pop music and modern dance. I’d like to know whether we should play one kind of music or different styles to start with. And is it enough to practise only at weekends? How can we get more chances to perform? We’d appreciate it if you would come up with a name for our band.
Looking forward to your reply.
Best wishes!
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：這是一封電子郵件。做題前一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義。這篇作文的要點(diǎn)是以提綱列出的，而且很詳細(xì)，考生要做的是將要點(diǎn)全面的合理的解釋清楚，應(yīng)該注意適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)以使行文連貫，比如適當(dāng)選用表示因果、遞進(jìn)、轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的連接詞，使文章流暢、通順，并避免因反復(fù)使用句式相同的簡(jiǎn)單句而造成的單調(diào)感。多使用高級(jí)詞匯和重點(diǎn)句型。
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】范文使用了各種多變的句式：Since you are a well-known musician, I’m writing this e-mail to ask you for some advice on how to form a band. 這句話(huà)使用since引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句，I, together with two boys and two girls in different classes in our school, want to form a band. 這句話(huà)使用了插入語(yǔ)， I’d like to know whether we should play one kind of music or different styles to start with. 這句話(huà)使用了賓語(yǔ)從句，And is it enough to practise only at weekends? 這句話(huà)使用it做形式主語(yǔ)。We’d appreciate it if you would come up with a name for our band.這句話(huà)使用了it做形式賓語(yǔ)。