Question

假設(shè)你是李華，你們班就“中學(xué)生是否能在校園里使用手機(jī)”為題開展了一次班會(huì)，請(qǐng)你將班會(huì)的討論結(jié)果給21st Century報(bào)編輯寫的一封信，并附上你的觀點(diǎn)。

支持者	反對(duì)者
便于與親友聯(lián)系	玩手機(jī)游戲，看電影等影響學(xué)習(xí)
可上網(wǎng)查找信息	貴重物品容易丟失
……	……
你的觀點(diǎn)？

要求：1.不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)學(xué)校和姓名 2. 不少于100詞

Dear Sir,

I’m writing to tell you ____________________________________________________

____________________________________________________________________________________________

__________________________________________________________

Best wishes, Yours,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Editor,

I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had on whether mobile phones should be brought to school. There are two different opinions on the question.

Sixty percent of the students think students can bring a mobile phone to school. It is convenient for a student who carries a mobile phone to get in touch with his/her parents and friends. On the other hand, he can also search for some important information on the Internet by the phone. Besides, it’s fashionable to have a mobile phone.

However, 40 percent of the students are against the view. In their opinion, with mobile phones, some students may have a chat on the Internet and spend much time playing games, which has a bad effect on their study and health. What’s more, one mobile phone may cost much money and it’s likely to be lost in the school.

As far as I’m concerned, students should place their study before other things and there is no need for us to use mobile phones. In a word, I don’t think it’s a good idea to bring mobile phones to school,

Best wishes

Yours,

Li Hua

 

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇書信類作文，要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)以表格的形式給出。動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真分析要點(diǎn)，理解要點(diǎn)要表達(dá)的含義，不能遺漏要點(diǎn)，跑題偏題。我們所要做的就是按要點(diǎn)內(nèi)容給21st Century報(bào)編輯寫的一封信。話題是關(guān)于“中學(xué)生是否能在校園里使用手機(jī)”的不同的觀點(diǎn)，注意題目的要求，寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要把表格中的要點(diǎn)都寫出來(lái)，不要有遺漏。在表達(dá)自己的觀點(diǎn)的時(shí)候，要充分發(fā)揮想象力，寫作時(shí)盡量使用自己不會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語(yǔ)法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章中表達(dá)的時(shí)候使用了詞組和句型：In their opinion在他們看來(lái), As far as I’m concerned據(jù)我所知, In a word總之, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had on whether mobile phones should be brought to school. 這句話用了賓語(yǔ)從句，It is convenient for a student who carries a mobile phone to get in touch with his/her parents and friends. 這句話用了it做形式主語(yǔ)和定語(yǔ)從句，with mobile phones, some students may have a chat on the Internet and spend much time playing games, which has a bad effect on their study and health. 這句話用了非限制性定語(yǔ)從句， it’s likely to be lost in the school.這句話用了固定句型， there is no need for us to use mobile phones. 使用了固定句型，I don’t think it’s a good idea to bring mobile phones to school,這句話用了否定前移。還有范文還使用了：On the other hand, Besides, What’s more,這樣的關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章更加連貫。

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