Question

【題目】環(huán)保部目前發(fā)布《中國環(huán)境噪聲污染防治報告（2016）》，披露了全國城市噪聲環(huán)境現(xiàn)狀以及噪音防治工作的總體狀況，其中，全國最“吵”的地方，并非京滬等特大城市，而是貴陽。請寫一封信到市長信箱，內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括：

1.表達對貴陽面臨的噪音問題的擔(dān)憂；

2.分析造成該問題的原因（如車輛增加、城市建設(shè)等）；

3.提出適當(dāng)建議。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear Mayor,

Recently, the environmental protection department has issued a report

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Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mayor，

Recently，the environmental protection department has issued a report concerning the noise pollution among China’s major cities．According to the report，our city，Guiyang，is faced with the most serious noise pollution，exceeding the super cities like Beijing and Shanghai and ranking the first in the list．

This phenomenon has drawn my great concern．From my point of view，the heavy noise pollution mainly comes from the ongoing increase of private cars and large scale city construction，which bring much inconvenience to people’s life．To ensure the living quality of our citizens，I suggest that the government should formulate some rules to limit the increase of private cars．Also，some facilities should be built and more trees planted to reduce the noise from city construction．

I hope my suggestions will be helpful and thank you for your reading．

Yours sincerely，

Li Hua

【解析】試題分析：本文是寫一封信到市長信箱，表達對貴陽面臨的噪音問題的擔(dān)憂，分析造成該問題的原因并提出恰當(dāng)建議。此文可分三段來寫，第一段介紹自己如何獲悉此消息和此消息的內(nèi)容；第二段表達擔(dān)憂，分析原因，并提出建議；第三段總結(jié)全文。成文時應(yīng)注意以下幾點：(1)內(nèi)容要點齊全。把提綱中的三點內(nèi)容表述完整。(2)人稱使用要恰當(dāng)。(3)時態(tài)：一般現(xiàn)在時為主。(4)適當(dāng)使用一些連詞和插入語，使文章自然、流暢。(5)恰當(dāng)使用一些高級詞匯和句型，以增加文章的檔次。

【亮點說明】

1.使用高級句型：包含非限制性定語從句的句子From my point of view, the heavy noise pollution mainly comes from the ongoing increase of private cars and large scale city construction, which bring much inconvenience to people’s life；虛擬語氣的使用I suggest that the government should formulate some rules to limit the increase of private cars．2.使用了過渡詞語：Also等。3.使用了重要短語：according to根據(jù)；be faced with面臨；draw my great concern吸引我極大的注意。