Question

16．假如你叫李華，今年18歲，是光明中學(xué)的一名高二學(xué)生．你所在的城市明年要舉辦國(guó)際旅游節(jié)（tourism festival），現(xiàn)向全市招募志愿者，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)向組委會(huì)寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)信，應(yīng)征旅游節(jié)志愿者的工作．
1、你的個(gè)人信息（年齡、性別、性格等）；
2、你的特殊優(yōu)勢(shì)（對(duì)地方旅游景點(diǎn)的了解，扎實(shí)的英語(yǔ)功底，相關(guān)的經(jīng)歷，溝通能力等）；
3、你的承諾．
注意：
1、詞數(shù)100左右；
2、可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
3、信的開(kāi)頭、結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear committee，
Thank you for taking your time to read my letter．I really hope to be a volunteer for the International Tourism Festival in our city．
I am Li Hua，an outgoing boy of 18 years old in Senior 2 of Guangming Middle School．I'm interested in travelling and have visited many places of interest．I have a good knowledge of our city's history，so I will be not only a servant but also a carrier of our splendid culture．（高分句型）What's more，English is my favourite and best subject．（高分句型）Last year I won the first prize in the oral English contest for high school students in our city．I think it easy for me to communicate well with the foreigners．Above all，I have experienced the 2010 Guangzhou Asian Games and I have been a successful stadium volunteer．（高分句型）
I'll be too glad to work for our city if I am given the opportunity．I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．（高分句型）
Looking forward to your early reply．
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息Li Hua所在的城市明年要舉辦國(guó)際旅游節(jié)，現(xiàn)向全市招募志愿者，本文要求以周琦的身份寫(xiě)信給主委會(huì)，應(yīng)征旅游節(jié)志愿者．所以本文使用第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主的時(shí)態(tài)．考生可以根據(jù)自己的實(shí)際情況組織全文要點(diǎn)．文章要點(diǎn)如下：1、你的個(gè)人信息（年齡、性別、性格等）；
2、你的特殊優(yōu)勢(shì)（對(duì)地方旅游景點(diǎn)的了解，扎實(shí)的英語(yǔ)功底，相關(guān)的經(jīng)歷，溝通能力等）；
3、你的承諾．建議文章分成兩部分，
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
這篇范文很好地完成了要求的所有任務(wù)，包含了所有的要點(diǎn)，沒(méi)有任何遺漏．另外范文中使用了較多的高級(jí)詞匯，如have a good knowledge of掌握…、place of interest名勝古跡、be familiar with熟悉…；同時(shí)文章中的串聯(lián)詞使用的也很到位，如what's more，above all；文章中最后還使用了分詞做狀語(yǔ)的用法，如I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．這些技巧的運(yùn)用讓文章顯得很有層次性．
I have a good knowledge of our city's history，so I will be not only a servant but also a carrier of our splendid culture．（高分句型）
What's more，English is my favourite and best subject．（高分句型）
Above all，I have experienced the 2010 Guangzhou Asian Games and I have been a successful stadium volunteer．（高分句型）
I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．（高分句型）

解答 Dear Committee，
      Thank you for taking your time to read my letter．I really hope to be a volunteer for the International Tourism Festival in our city．
      I am Li Hua，an outgoing boy of 18 years old in Senior 2 of Guangming Middle School．I'm interested in travelling and have visited many places of interest．I have a good knowledge of our city's history，so I will be not only a servant but also a carrier of our splendid culture．（高分句型）What's more，English is my favourite and best subject．（高分句型）Last year I won the first prize in the oral English contest for high school students in our city．I think it easy for me to communicate well with the foreigners．Above all，I have experienced the 2010 Guangzhou Asian Games and I have been a successful stadium volunteer．（高分句型）
       I'll be too glad to work for our city if I am given the opportunity．I'll be surely devoted to the job，making the foreigners more familiar with our city．（高分句型）
       Looking forward to your early reply．

                                                                                                                                                                                                      Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                      Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．