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17．假如你是初三學(xué)生李華，在初三緊張的學(xué)習(xí)生活中，你感受到了父母對(duì)你濃濃的愛(ài)．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下要點(diǎn)提示，向你的美國(guó)朋友Tom寫(xiě)一封信．
1．成績(jī)并不優(yōu)異，但父母一直鼓勵(lì)完；
2．父母在其他方面對(duì)你的關(guān)愛(ài)（自擬兩點(diǎn)）；
3．表達(dá)對(duì)父母的感激之情；
4．請(qǐng)對(duì)方回信，談?wù)勛约旱母改福?br />具體要求：
1．所寫(xiě)內(nèi)容必須包括上面提示的所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮，但不要逐字翻譯；
2．詞數(shù)：100個(gè)詞左右，開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)；
3．語(yǔ)句通順，意思連貫，條理清楚，字跡工整；
4．文中不得出現(xiàn)真實(shí)校名、姓名等其它信息，否則，不予評(píng)分．
DearTom，
     How's it going？This time I'd like to talk about my parents．I don't realize how much they love me until I am underpressure．
（成績(jī)并不優(yōu)異，但父母一直鼓勵(lì)）I am not good at study，but my parents always encourage me to be confident and keep trying．（父母在生活上對(duì)我的照顧）Every day they come home，they go out of their way to make delicious food for me．They look after me as well as they can．（父母對(duì)我的精神上的鼓勵(lì)）Also，they pay much attention to my feelings．Whenever they find me upset，they will communicate with me patiently．
（父母在其他方面對(duì)你的關(guān)愛(ài)）Now I have made a decision to study harder and understand my parents better．Only in this way can I show my thanks to my parents．
（請(qǐng)對(duì)方回信） Please write soon and tell me about your parents．
Yours sincerely，

                                                                 Yours sincerely
                                                                      Li  Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文，要求是向你的美國(guó)朋友Tom寫(xiě)一封信說(shuō)說(shuō)父母對(duì)你濃濃的愛(ài)．寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)是四點(diǎn)，1．成績(jī)并不優(yōu)異，但父母一直鼓勵(lì)；2．父母在其他方面對(duì)你的關(guān)愛(ài)（自擬兩點(diǎn)）；3．表達(dá)對(duì)父母的感激之情；4．請(qǐng)對(duì)方回信，談?wù)勛约旱母改�，人稱以第一人稱為主來(lái)寫(xiě)，時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．
重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)和句型：encourage sb to do sth鼓勵(lì)某人去做某事，go out of one's way to do sth不辭辛苦做某事，pay attention to注意等等

解答 Dear Tom，
   How's it going？This time I'd like to talk about my parents．I don't realize how much they love me until I am under pressure．
   I am not good at study，but my parents always encourage me to be confident and keep trying．（成績(jī)并不優(yōu)異，但父母一直鼓勵(lì)） Every day they come home，they go out of their way to make delicious food for me（高分句型）．They look after me as well as they can．（父母在生活上對(duì)我的照顧）
Also，they pay much attention to my feelings．Whenever they find me upset，they will communicate with me patiently．（父母對(duì)我的精神上的鼓勵(lì)）
   Now I have made a decision to study harder and understand my parents better．Only in this way can I show my thanks to my parents（父母在其他方面對(duì)你的關(guān)愛(ài)）（高分句型）．
   Please write soon and tell me about your parents．（請(qǐng)對(duì)方回信）                                                               Yours sincerely，
                                                                                                                  Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文是一篇給材料作文，短文的開(kāi)頭已經(jīng)給出．寫(xiě)作時(shí)先要圍繞這些要點(diǎn)組織材料，確定寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容，注意將這些要點(diǎn)全部表達(dá)出來(lái)，并且要有適當(dāng)?shù)陌l(fā)揮，在談到自己的觀點(diǎn)時(shí)，要結(jié)合活動(dòng)內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)出自己的觀點(diǎn)．